Wednesday, August 06, 2014

Good Customer? -- Work in progress


Day I remember, Macy's bag in hand
I went to the mall, present there to buy 
Object of my search nonchalantly passed
I didn't recognize a soul around

I had started this in hopes of a later poem.  The copied flyer was a part of Victoria Secret's Christmas Special.  I did buy Mrs. Jim a pair of pretty red checked PJ's for Christmas, then saved this one.  But then I didn't go back to use the free panty offer's coupon.

Mainly I'm not sure of where I'm going with it.  Secondly, I ran out of time the day I started.  Although it is based on a true experience, there will be additional information that may not necessarily be true.

Perhaps I should return to Victoria's and watch the men who came in, see how they act, what they do, and how they were treated.  When I came in I was treated very nicely with the clerk giving me some very useful suggestions.  But I did end up with the red PJ's shown in the flyer.
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Photo, poem, and explanation copyright, Jimmiehov 2014, all rights reserved
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Today I am linked in with at (Real Toads, Poems in Progress)(Link)
She said this for instructions: "...I am talking about poems that end mid sentence.  Perhaps the ones you started with a wowza first stanza, but then it just unraveled and fell flat.  The poems you think about once in a while with a twinge of guilt for leaving them unfinished...Those poems, I want them. ..."
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Saturday, August 02, 2014

Flash Fiction 55 -- Little Grey Squirrel -- Open Link Monday

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Little Grey Squirrel, Stopped 
Little grey Squirrel, stopped on my back porch
He wants to see what he can see from there
Was a brown dog out back, ready to bark
I know he'd like to chase me up his tree
Where's the calico kitten's milk today
She always shares her milk with me, my friend
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Photo and poem copyright, Jimmiehov 2014, all rights reserved
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Today I am liked with Fireblossom at the Real Toads, Flash Fiction 55 (Link)
She said this for instructions: "...write a poem or a piece of flash fiction in exactly fifty-five words, no more, no less. Any subject; children, shoes, nervous breakdowns, whatever..."
Update:  Linked in again with Magaly (Real Toads Open Link Monday)(Link)

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