Sunday, May 17, 2009

One Single Impression: Tolerance II


ignorance is bliss
tolerance not much I have
straight to jail you go

foolishness is out
'cause tolerance none I have
don't be in my court

repentance if true
then tolerance some I have
charity abates

Copyright © 2009 Jimmiehov. All Rights Reserved

Find more poems at One Single Impression
"What's It Like" as prompt,
suggested by Regina of
Kilauea Poetry

Painting is easy when you don’t know how, but very difficult when you do. Edgar Dégas
The same may go for poetry? (whatever, I enjoy painting with the words!)

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At Sunday, May 17, 2009 12:19:00 AM, Anonymous gautami tripathy said...

I like the second stanza. The third one somewhat feels stilted..

fingers dance merrily in air

At Sunday, May 17, 2009 12:49:00 AM, Blogger Jim said...

Thank you, Gautami. I didn't like the third one either, I changed it quite a bit, now it is closer to telling my intended meaning.

At Sunday, May 17, 2009 1:34:00 AM, Blogger Amias (ljm and liquidplastic) said...

I was reading this, looked away for a minute and I thought the third stanza changed.

Jim, being old, I learned to have tolerance in just about everything except when someone physically attack me.

Tell Mrs. Jim she is so right!

At Sunday, May 17, 2009 3:18:00 AM, Blogger anthonynorth said...

A great take on it. I particularly like the first stanza.

At Sunday, May 17, 2009 4:18:00 AM, Blogger Edward S Gault said...

An excellent piece, Jim.

At Sunday, May 17, 2009 6:33:00 AM, Blogger SandyCarlson said...

Tolerance as grace has given way to tolerance as a blind eye, hasn't it? Who's entitled to umpteen chances to undermine the quality of others' lives?

Well done. I like this piece very much.

At Sunday, May 17, 2009 10:20:00 AM, Blogger Sherri B. said...

You make some very honest points! I enjoyed these.

At Monday, May 18, 2009 4:35:00 AM, Blogger spacedlaw said...

Difficult piece, one can really feel tension in it.

At Monday, May 18, 2009 9:16:00 AM, Blogger Quiet Paths said...

Well around here if you do land in the Pen you've really had lots of chances to reform. I sure get where you are coming from.

At Monday, May 18, 2009 3:08:00 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

It is obvious that this is something you have thougt about a lot. I like the first best, too.

At Monday, May 18, 2009 4:04:00 PM, Blogger Tumblewords: said...

Well said - the first one rings loud and true and the second spells the sentence. Nice work...

At Monday, May 18, 2009 8:02:00 PM, Blogger Tammy Brierly said...

I loved that last stanza Jim. Nice job on the prompt.

At Tuesday, May 19, 2009 9:56:00 AM, Anonymous gautami tripathy said...

I like it much better!

At Tuesday, May 19, 2009 8:13:00 PM, Blogger Beth P. said...

Is this some iambic pentameter?
Interesting reading out loud!

Thanks, Jim!

At Wednesday, May 20, 2009 11:39:00 AM, Blogger Patti said...

great interpretationof the prompt Jim...this was a hard one, I thought- as tolerance is a tricky one

At Thursday, May 21, 2009 10:45:00 AM, Blogger Tammie Lee said...

repentance if true

Yes if true means a great deal.

At Friday, May 22, 2009 5:28:00 PM, Blogger Maggie said...

I enjoyed this read.
You said so much truth in these lines.


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