a Poem with an E.E. Cummings start
in the street of the sky
night walks scattering poems
small whiskey bottles empty
of their drink and littering for the street sweepers
used cigarette buts
longing for some unfortunate souls
they'll be smoked until fingers hot drop them into dried grass
the sky is bleak with sadness pockets of gray soggy socks
cast off as carriers
of disease
maggots
dread sickness looms watery eyes
eyes that never see the sun
night is sorrowed shakes drops from the whisky bottles
no sleep there can be
noise
bright lights rowdy folk
heads on grungy pillows toss turn and vomit more
arising from the ilk
night
walks down the filthy street
stumbling on
cracks where weeds trying to flower grow
breathing bodies passed out
laying on
wilted brown grass
those awake reciting scattered poems they find
waiting
for the moon that never comes
coffee houses
open as night fades and dawn cracks
wine or coffee
they take their pick
street
under
sky
at
night
crawls
walks
tries
scattering
of
poems
_ _ _ _
- Photo and Poem Copyright, © Jimmiehov 2012 and 2018, All Rights Reserved ~~ Alley cat found 2012 in an alley during our visit to Dubrovnik, Croatia (link).
- I'm linked with Sanaa Rizvi in the Imaginary Garden at http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2018/08/on-edge-of-starry-night.html?m=1
- Sanaa has posted a nice e.e. cummings poem at that Site. We are to take cue from his last line which I have used as my title tonight.
Labels: Personal-Challenge-2018, Poem, Story, Toads
posted by Jim @ 8/23/2018 10:42:00 PM
13 comments
13 Comments:
Jim, this has to be my favourite poem of yours! I especially love the lines:
'the sky is bleak with sadness pockets of gray soggy socks'
and
'those awake reciting scattered poems they find
waiting
for the moon that never comes'.
A scene very well painted by your words. (I used to live in a city where such scenes might be found.)
Wowww💞 this is absolutely stunning, Jim! Especially love; "those awake reciting scattered poems they find waiting for the moon that never comes." Passion-filled write 😊
Wonderfully descriptive. I love the sky bleak with sadness.
You were inspired ~ and it shows!!
"they'll be smoked until fingers hot drop them into dried grass"
this is an absolutely stellar line Jim! it's word perfect for what often happens and sets the scene, along with the littered whiskey bottles, of a bleak side of city (now creeping into the wilder spaces too) life and what it means to be on the fringes, the edges, the homeless ...
"the sky is bleak with sadness pockets of gray soggy socks"
another phenomenal line .... it is so atmospheric ...
"arising from the ilk
night
walks down the filthy street
stumbling on
cracks where weeds trying to flower grow"
oh holy ambiance in this cracked, bleak scene ....
those awake reciting scattered poems they find
waiting
for the moon that never comes
coffee houses
open as night fades and dawn cracks
wine or coffee
they take their pick
brilliant ....
this Jim, is by far, one of the best of your poems Jim -
you've written from the heart, from observations, from a place where you haven't tried to self-censor yourself or restrict yourself to what you "think" a poem must be, fitting into clipped lines etc. or forms, and so, for me, personally, even as you've chosen a "darker" aspect of life to showcase, you've done so with incredible energy, passion and some truly amazing verse. This Jim, is where you shine. (and I hope you don't take offense at this, because I don't mean it in a bad way at all - but you are a story-teller Jim, it's clear in your comments, and you should consider writing more from this place of your spirit, because this is "your voice" - and you can always edit and revise as necessary, but damn - this is a most excellent piece!)
I'm with Sherry, love the vivid descriptions. I can practically see night tripping over all the mess. Poor lady, our dear night.
I enjoyed reading this very descriptive poem.
"for the moon that never comes" Your poem is so well done - You picked up the feel of the original (I like yours better - not a huge fan of Cummings). I always try to turn things "happy" and I probably should have tried this avenue as a challenge. Anyway, I think your effort there is amazing!
Vivid settings here, I particularly liked the cigarette butts smoked "smoked until fingers hot drop them" - and a very ee cumming's disruptive final stanza.
Oh my gosh! This is absolutely one of my favorites you've written. You have so poetically, perfectly described the island of the street life.
waiting for the moon that never comes
coffee houses open
as night fades
and dawn cracks
wine or coffee they take their pick
One often gets disappointed by events that fizzle off after a long wait. Damage control comes in the form of Hobson's Choice not really forgiving but just frustrations further enhanced. A case of being down and out!
Hank
Living close to a large city this is a sight one often sees, with those who have given up hope of living normal lives, exist in corners and storefronts and under bridges if they can't get into hostels that night so that any money they have begged has been spent on booze to ease the pain.
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