Friday, July 15, 2016

The Painter and the Model ~~ a Words Count poem


May I paint you with the ring in your nose
Could I lead you around in my garden
Might I feel your pain when they pull your chain

My chain is light and my pull will be gentle

We can stop in the garden house, repose
For you a daisy bouquet I will bring 

I so want to feel your pain 

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Bottom Photo and Poem Copyright © 2012 and 2016 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved

Top Picture is a Milena Pavlović Barili painting by posted by Mama Zen with her instructions to write no more than 60 words (I have exactly 60.).  Find Mama Z at the blog post, Words Count, of The Imaginary Garden with Real Toadshttp://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2016/07/words-count-with-mama-zen.html.

Note that the boy in the top picture has a ring in his nose.

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10 Comments:

At Friday, July 15, 2016 3:35:00 AM, Blogger Vanessa V Kilmer said...

Very interesting grouping. Your poem brings to mind all kinds of possibilities.

 
At Friday, July 15, 2016 4:37:00 AM, Blogger Kerry O'Connor said...

This says a lot about a certain kind of enslavement.. Very thought-provoking, Jim.

 
At Friday, July 15, 2016 7:36:00 AM, Blogger brudberg said...

Alas we do think it's all about ownership and control.. maybe that's the ailment we need to treat in the world.

 
At Friday, July 15, 2016 10:11:00 AM, Blogger Mama Zen said...

This is really cool, Jim!

 
At Friday, July 15, 2016 1:31:00 PM, Blogger hyperCRYPTICal said...

Thought provoking indeed. I'm still thinking!
Anna :o]

 
At Friday, July 15, 2016 6:56:00 PM, Blogger kaykuala said...

My chain is light and my pull will be gentle
I so want to feel your pain

One often can cry knowing there are some people who continue to suffer but cannot get out of it.

Hank

 
At Friday, July 15, 2016 11:29:00 PM, Blogger Jim said...

It is bad to be that way, Hank. I had that feeling sometimes growing up. Then it would have been nice if I could have flown out a window and never return.
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At Saturday, July 16, 2016 10:00:00 AM, Blogger Bekkie Sanchez said...

What a thought provoking poem! Being pulled around by one's nose is not ideal.

 
At Saturday, July 16, 2016 3:47:00 PM, Blogger Outlawyer said...

I think the writer definitely wants to feel something on the person at the end of his chain (or her rope!) Ha. Sweet poem, Jim. Thanks. k.

 
At Sunday, July 17, 2016 6:12:00 PM, Blogger Hannah said...

For me, there's an underlying tension to this piece...well written, Jim.

 

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