Saturday, June 18, 2016

A Micro Poem Challenge


Death and Life ~ Gustav Klimt
Sisters, Mothers 

Sisters of day 
Play with your brothers 
Play as you may 
Daredevils training they 

Day comes too soon 

Bold brothers become 
Enjoy your swoon 
Show your love became 

Mothers at night 

Mourning for brothers
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Poem copyright, 2016 Jimmiehov, All rights reserved 

 - Picture credit with this week's prompt where I'm linked to Kerry O'Conner 
at The Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, "the sisters Death and Night ~ Micro Poetry" (link)
 - Kerry's desire from us is a micro poem of ten lines. Not counting the title, mIne is ten lines, 46 syllables, and 34 words 

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10 Comments:

At Sunday, June 19, 2016 12:51:00 AM, Blogger brudberg said...

Oh the day is the murderous time, the mourning at night. Repetitions well used in you chant.

 
At Sunday, June 19, 2016 1:26:00 AM, Blogger Magaly Guerrero said...

That last line is heartbreaking... better listen to the ones that come before. ♥

 
At Sunday, June 19, 2016 3:39:00 AM, OpenID howanxious said...

The last two lines in particular are wonderful.
-HA

 
At Sunday, June 19, 2016 5:51:00 AM, Blogger Kerry O'Connor said...

I like where the poem leads, to those last two lines, which really stand out for me.

 
At Sunday, June 19, 2016 7:28:00 AM, Blogger Outlawyer said...

Oh sad. That boldness can be both wonderful and tragic-- your end is such a wonderful distilled turnAbout-- sorry for typos-- I am on phone! Thanks. K.

 
At Sunday, June 19, 2016 8:32:00 AM, Blogger jabblog said...

A light-hearted start leading to a sad ending - that's life (sometimes)

 
At Sunday, June 19, 2016 8:48:00 PM, Blogger Sherry Blue Sky said...

I, too, was most struck by your two closing lines.

 
At Monday, June 20, 2016 3:32:00 AM, Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

'Twas ever thus – more's the pity. You do well to remind us.

 
At Monday, June 20, 2016 5:04:00 PM, Blogger Susie Clevenger said...

It seems this is spoken too often.

 
At Tuesday, June 21, 2016 2:54:00 AM, Blogger hyperCRYPTICal said...

Excellent close.
Anna :o]

 

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