Thursday, July 27, 2023

The duck stays with us -- a Poem for dVerse using the Duplex form



Our Guest 

She spends her mornings in our front yard
That's where the shade is in the mornings 
  
Where the shade is in the afternoons
In the afternoons this duck's across the street 

She's across the street where the shade is then 
She drinks sprinkler water from the street 

I worry about the water in the street 
Has washed fertilizer from the soil 

Fertilizer from the soil tastes not good 
She drinks it anyway that's all she's got 

All she's got but needs it for her eggs 
She'll hatch them in a shadow box nest  

Her chicks after they're born will leave the nest
She'll spend her mornings in our front yard again 
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 - Photo and Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2023, All Rights Reserved 
 - I am linked with Merril D Smith who in dVerse MTB the Duplex has introduced to us a new form, "The Duplex". which I have copied its construction below.  Read more also here, you may wish to try it.  Fun, a little tricky to make it come out right, sort of. 
 - Click here to read the efforts of other writers, you will all like them.
 - O yes, this starts out like a poem that I wrote on my other active blog.  The duck really has adopted us, and spends its time in the three places.
  
 - Here are the basic components of the form: 
 14 Lines, in couplets 9 to 11 syllables for each line (but the lines don’t have to have the same number of syllables) 
The second line of each couplet is partially repeated or echoed by the first line of the following couplet. 
The last line (line 14) echoes the first line. 
The second line of each couplet should change the meaning of the first line in some unexpected way. 
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14 Comments:

At Thursday, July 27, 2023 3:35:00 PM, Blogger Merril D. Smith said...

Thank you for sharing the story of the duck in your front yard. They are fun to watch.

 
At Friday, July 28, 2023 12:56:00 AM, Anonymous Reena Saxena said...

You added 'again; in the last line to give it a beautiful cyclic feel.

 
At Friday, July 28, 2023 3:03:00 AM, Blogger Kim M. Russell said...

A lovely visitor to start the morning, Jim! We haven’t had ducks visit for a long time – pheasants and magpies, but the ducks here tend to stay on the river. I like the way you follow the duck through the day.

 
At Friday, July 28, 2023 6:00:00 AM, Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Very interesting duplex Jim. Thanks for dropping by my blog.

Much💜love

 
At Friday, July 28, 2023 3:08:00 PM, Blogger kaykuala said...

Her chicks after they're born will leave the nest
She'll spend her mornings in our front yard again

Great close Dr Jim! Your poem provides a finality done very smoothly. Typically not easy to accomplish!

Hank

 
At Friday, July 28, 2023 6:57:00 PM, Blogger Frewin55 said...

You nailed that form Jim...

 
At Saturday, July 29, 2023 9:21:00 PM, Anonymous lynn__ said...

Your duplex is simply ducky, Jim! I enjoyed it your guest as well :)

 
At Monday, July 31, 2023 10:06:00 AM, Blogger pvcann.com said...

There's a sense of vulnerability in this that speaks to me.

 
At Monday, July 31, 2023 10:29:00 AM, Anonymous Tine de Jong said...

Perhaps the duck is woundend and cannot fly. But you wrote a good poem and its also lovely story.
And yes i do still follow you.
Give this duck some good ducks food
and perhaps also water that is pure clean
if it comes again into your garden inbetween

 
At Monday, July 31, 2023 7:09:00 PM, Blogger purplepeninportland.com said...

This is lovely, Jim!

 
At Monday, July 31, 2023 10:47:00 PM, Anonymous Melissa Lemay said...

This is so beautiful. I love it.

 
At Tuesday, August 01, 2023 4:37:00 AM, Anonymous ben Alexander said...

Just lovely, from start to finish, Jim.

Much love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com

 
At Saturday, January 13, 2024 5:19:00 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

Tine, thanks for nice comment. I hadn't realized you still read here. I'll peek your way again soon.
The duck flies up to her nest every afternoon. She also flew to the mail box corner, I had chased her away from our yard. I had thought she had lost her way back to the flock. So I let her stay the from then the next day. She spent the nights on the nest until the babies came. They haven't returned.
Jim
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At Saturday, January 13, 2024 5:22:00 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

Tine, thanks for nice comment. I hadn't realized you still read here. I'll peek your way again soon.
The duck flies up to her nest every afternoon. She also flew to the mail box corner, I had chased her away from our yard. I had thought she had lost her way back to the flock. So I let her stay the from then the next day. She spent the nights on the nest until the babies came. They haven't returned.
Jim

 

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