One Single Impression: Dropped
Dropped Off—He said, she said
[He] I'll drop you off on my way,
you won't have to take your car.
I'll pick you up when I'm through.
. . .
[She] No way that I'll be dropped off.
[He] It'll work so good for you.
I'm going by--can you dress?
See all your friends, shop for food.
. . .
[She] I'll tell you what—drop you off.
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[He] I'll drop you off on my way,
you won't have to take your car.
I'll pick you up when I'm through.
. . .
[She] No way that I'll be dropped off.
[He] It'll work so good for you.
I'm going by--can you dress?
See all your friends, shop for food.
. . .
[She] I'll tell you what—drop you off.
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[bottom picture, Andorra shopping district]
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"Dropped" as prompt,
suggested by Gautami Tripathy of Rooted
Painting is easy when you don’t know how, but very difficult when you do. Edgar Dégas
The same may go for poetry? (whatever, I enjoy painting with the words!)
The same may go for poetry? (whatever, I enjoy painting with the words!)
Labels: Humor, One Single Impression, Poem, Syllabic Form
posted by Jim @ 5/24/2009 12:03:00 AM
21 comments
21 Comments:
I always thought that the "drop you off" expression was a tad sinister (not that the " je vais te jeter" we use at home is better by any account...)
je vais te jeter
I will throw you
Natalie, I didn't know this. Thank you.
..
At first read it appears playful but on a second read I find it deep.
changing orbits
Jim,
Thanks for the smiles this early morning.
Yes, there are sinister levels to this one - and the fun one, of course.
really cool :)
The tone and the thrown away "no way I'll be dropped off" suggest a darker level. I liked this, Jim.
Such a simple phrase but so many interpretations. I love the interchange between the two characters each bent of their own reason for wanting to or not wanting to be "dropped off"
Good job! Humor and insight all in one.
I love watching husbands and wives on the rare occasions I go to the mall. The men always have that "Oh, my God, how did I let myself get talked into this?" look.
i really m thankful for ur comment on my poem "dropped". It was a heartfelt thing u did,,, coz u judged my feelings bang on !! thanks again.
:D Enjoyed this
It feels as though there is a story behind this. It is good to speak ones truth. Nicely written.
im totally dropped (in a smilling way) reading this :)
Thelesperma filifolium, eh?
Yes, I'm with Nathalie--it's a little weird to be 'dropped off'.
While walking the dog this past week, I saw a distant neighbor literally swing up his driveway in his open Jeep, dump his girlfriend? Wife? Concubine? into the driveway and drive off screeching into the night. She was in tears, raging mad. I was disturbed, but don't know either of them. Saw their kids out sitting on the curb on my way back and said hello and let them pet the dog, etc...
Next morning the jeep is in the driveway.
Makes ya wonder!
Thanks for the great take on the prompt, Jim!
I second the motion, thanks for the smiles!
funny :)
love the second shot, very romantic
If I had to be dropped that would be an OK drop ;)
Surely a layered short! Nice work...
i like the conversational tone of this.
Sounds typical husband and wife!
Now, on to buttons. I have tried to find a photo of the button you mention. I remember the button and string toy as well as spinning a top with a string and button or, often as not, a string with a knot in the end. Anyway, send me your address and I will try to find one for you.
Nice one Jim....it'll b great 2 have u on my blog.Pls c my poems too.
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