A poem, trial metafiction
Dr. Who?
Dear reader, my wish for you is
try to remember who I am
I'm who you think I am. Only
I won't say who on these pages
You see the day I met Louise
We had this thing, love at first sight
Very short, courtship made in Hell
Married Jackson style. Fever still
She too had her thing, other men
Caught them one night in swank hotel
Dead, I shot him dead, Texas style
You may remember reading this
Who I was, lawyer sprang me loose
Can't mess with Texas boys they knew
Gave me alias sent me back
Married again Belle didn't know
She'll tow the line no second chance
Louise? I shot her too, in a way
Hit man clean shot in her head
Sent him back to Columbia
It wasn't me who did them in
Or is it? I'm just "Belle's old man"
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- Photo and Poem Copyright © 2017 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved
- I'm linked with Kerry O'Connor, at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Literary Excursions with Kerry, http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2017/06/literary-excursions-with-kerry.html
- Kerry wants us to try something somewhat new in poetry, metafiction. You can read an introduction and get ideas about writing metafiction style at the link above.
- Playing a little bit here too, I'm using one syllable words, maximum one word or none with more per line. A few times I broke my self inflicted rule.
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Labels: Personal-Challenge-2017, Poem, Real Toads, Syllabic Form
posted by Jim @ 6/22/2017 11:03:00 PM
10 comments
10 Comments:
No, you broke it 5 times (in various ways). Fun poem anyway.
He was just too lucky, I'd say
Could see you having fun writing this one
Much love...
Poor Belle.
The single syllables create a very interesting clipped style, Jim. It definitely adds to the story-telling.
This reads like a film, Jim, and I really like it. The speaker sounds like he just stepped out of the screen.
And the title made me think of the Doctor Who TV show, of course. :-)
This story fits very well to be told in single syllables...
Such an evocative write, Jim!
A nice literary excursion!
This makes me think of Johnny Cash ... because of the "Jackson" reference and the way it's sort of written in the storytelling style of his Folsom Prison song.
Loved this and the fast paced rythm
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