NaPoWriMo 2021 Day Ten - What
[ My photo -- Along South Africa Highway ]
Rain drops and door knobs
You can hear the rain drops
Falling on my tin roof
I'm looking for something
But I don't know what it is
Not to keep the rain away
Cause I kinda like it that way
I'm looking for something
but I don't know what it is
Got doorknobs on my mind
Looking through the drawer
Those doorknobs are in my head
In my head and they won't go away
Rain on my tin roof
sweet music in my ear
But I've got doorknobs in my head
Doorknobs are turning now
Turn one to let you in
But close the door behind you
We can't let the rain come in
Its falling on my tin roof
Noise louder than
my washing machine
Raindrops falling
Doorknobs turning
Washing machine
Tin roof patter
And you come in
That's the melody
Singing in my head
No meaning to me
Perhaps you'd better stay
I'm looking for something
But I don't know what it is
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- Poem and Photo Copyright, Jimmiehov 2021, All Rights Reserved
- I'm linked with NaPoWriMo 2021 Day Ten, https://www.napowrimo.net/day-ten-9/
- I'm also linked with Magaly Guerrero for the Writer's Pantry #65, https://poetsandstorytellersunited.blogspot.com/search/label/Writers%E2%80%99%20Pantry
posted by Jim @ 4/10/2021 05:04:00 AM
11 comments
11 Comments:
Curiouly I was surprised that we writers may be puzzled over this subject as there is always something else I want to write about and make my feelings felt...or to use your last two lines to search for a subject that you need to air your views.
That’s a lovely sound, raindrops on a tin roof, musical and often nostalgic. I prefer doorknobs to door handles because my sleeves always get caught on them, but the doorknobs in your poem are mysterious, Jim. I love the crescendo of sounds in:
‘Raindrops falling
Doorknobs turning
Washing machine
Tin roof patter
And you come in’.
I hope you’ve found what you were looking for.
As a forgetful pluviophile, I enjoyed your poem very much.
Love this
Love the lines
"And you come in
That's the melody
Singing in my head" That's beautiful
and what to look for when you have the wonderful sounds of
Raindrops falling
Doorknobs turning
Washing machine
Tin roof patter
I enjoyed the musicality of this. Perhaps we are all looking for something but don't know what it is? Whether it's the thing of, 'Oh, what did I come into this room for?' or the angst of a restless soul. Having someone who comes in and brings with them the melody that sings in your head, I think would make anything better.
Enjoyed this piece very much Jim, that sense of intuitively searching for more nourishment on behalf a deeply felt bond/emotion that glows within you that is tangible within. On first sight the notion of a 'doorknob perhaps not the most poetic of metaphors, but it works here - as a symbol of the door we all have (sometime open, sometime closed... ) to perception... Good stuff...
Very nice to read. I love the idea of hearing the rain on the tin roof. Doorknobs did give me the idea of opening doors, or not, and what may be behind them, and what the narrator even wanted to find behind them. I couldn't make anything of that prompt!
Jim, your poems continue to delight .. this one no exception. Rain on a tin roof is a most delightful way to sleep. (unless hail is mixed in.
I felt that and it took me places.
Given that many of us are in our later years, it is often we arrive at a room and forget whey we're there. I envy you the rain on the tin roof. I always loved that sound!
Nice rain-patter sound effects...
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