We cratered - Heroic couplet form
We cried together
.
We saw it coming, proverbial mile
Fate had dealt us dirty, sardonic smile
.
We saw it coming, proverbial mile
Fate had dealt us dirty, sardonic smile
We cried together, that long fated night
Why did you shed those tears, why did we cry
Why did you shed those tears, why did we cry
And when we cratered, it all fell apart
So now we're saying goodbyes, saddened hearts
Our love has gone away, no telling where
Not meant to be, can't return, we don't care
We had some good times, but they didn't last
You can text, I'll reply, we're in the past
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Picture, Poem Copyright 2014, 2018, © Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved
- 2014 Photo, http://jimmiehov6.blogspot.com/2014/07/blog-post_19.html
- I am linked with Kim Russell at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Weekend Mini Challenge: The Heroic Couplet, http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2018/03/weekend-mini-challenge-heroic-couplet.html
- Kim had been looking at new-to-her forms, the Heroic Couplet was it.
(Linked above, go see)
- I am also linked with Sanaa Rizvi at The Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Tuesday Platform ( http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2018/03/the-tuesday-platform_27.html?m=1 )
Picture, Poem Copyright 2014, 2018, © Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved
- 2014 Photo, http://jimmiehov6.blogspot.com/2014/07/blog-post_19.html
- I am linked with Kim Russell at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Weekend Mini Challenge: The Heroic Couplet, http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2018/03/weekend-mini-challenge-heroic-couplet.html
- Kim had been looking at new-to-her forms, the Heroic Couplet was it.
(Linked above, go see)
- I am also linked with Sanaa Rizvi at The Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Tuesday Platform ( http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2018/03/the-tuesday-platform_27.html?m=1 )
Labels: Love Poem, Poem forms, Sunday-Mini-Challenge, Syllabic Form, Tuesday Platform, Week-Mini-Challenge
posted by Jim @ 3/27/2018 06:30:00 AM
5 comments
5 Comments:
Excellent work on the form, Jim 💜
I really like this form. The sadness of a relationship gone is so vivid here.
Love what you did on the form... the picture says it all of such a failing relationship
Well done. Enjoyed your heroic couplet. And as well the sad romantic tale told
much love...
We had some good times, but they didn't last
You can text, I'll reply, we're in the past
The end can be most sad Dr Jim, even frustrating with lots of regret (though with anger in some odd instances)
Hank
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