One Single Impression: River
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River of Tears
I lay down my head
I hope to sleep
My river runs high
High with tears I've shed
Shed those tears for you
Dreaming I hear you call
From the other side
That river I'll cross
Meet your arms to abide
River is my dowry for you
Oh were it to come true
Then true to you I'd be
Tears of joy would shout
Years of love we could share
River never running dry
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Prompt word, River, suggested by Ramesh at A Little More Than Ordinary..
Find more poems at One Single Impression using "River" as prompt
The photo was previously published here on Thursday, September 07, 2006 (link).
It is of the Bayou Lafourche (prounounced la-foosh) near Napoleonville, Louisiana. Bayou Lafourche starts at Donaldsonville and runs down into the Gulf of Mexico.
Find more poems at One Single Impression using "River" as prompt
The photo was previously published here on Thursday, September 07, 2006 (link).
It is of the Bayou Lafourche (prounounced la-foosh) near Napoleonville, Louisiana. Bayou Lafourche starts at Donaldsonville and runs down into the Gulf of Mexico.
Labels: One-Single-Impression, Poem
posted by Jim @ 10/09/2011 12:03:00 AM
19 comments
19 Comments:
Really mellow sentiment ! Love it !
Beautiful, heartfelt words.
very nice...!!
"Years of love we could share
River never running dry"
may it come true!
Smooth flowing.
Beautiful...
much
very beautiful.
Jim my friend, this is beautiful. Hope you get across.
Melanie
River is my dowry for you
I love that line!
A river of tears...so very touching Jim. You've hit an emotional chord with this one!!
At first stanza, I read a beautiful loop poem...then I was lost in transit...:)
The words are as touching like how a river flows...
A lot of emotions all soft and sweet with much feel!! Beautiful Jim!!
Thank you, Amity. Now I have switched the sixth and seventh lines hoping it will flow better. I hope that will make the loop poem's flow less stilted.
I've had it both ways. The way you saw it helped a bit with my scan rhyme scheme. I think the capitalization of the first letters may also hurt its flow.
Thank you again,
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I loved it ji... you took the river flowing so well.. lovely lines these:
River is my dowry to you...
Thanks!!
Such tenderness! Beautiful.
A lot of longing here. Sometimes things (rivers) keep us apart.
Wow! The sky is so blue. The poem is so beautiful :)
Wow Jim you poured your heart and soul in this one. Love the sentiment.
Good to hear from you on my art blog. As you now know we just arrived at our winter home in AZ. I also have had bronchitis for a month but I hope to get back in the groove soon.
so happy to have stopped by! truly jim one of your finest!!!...
Beautiful..yet sad...I love this line...River is my dowry for you...nice work
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