"than bauk" form -- Fussy Little Forms
The Proposal;
love wins out
I think I feel
Warm heart real hot
I realized
Then surmised you
and skies'd confirm
A long-term match
_ _ _ _
Poem Copyright, © 2017 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved
Thank you, Marian, for introducing this form. Read more about it here:
http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2017/12/fussy-little-forms-than-bauk.html
In case you don't, here is an intro to the "than bauk" form:
The than bauk form is a three-line poem with four syllables each, featuring rhymes in kind of a step pattern like this:
x x x R x x R x
x R x x
x R x x
One could chain together several to make a longer poem, like this:
x x x A
x x A x
x A x B
x x B x
x B x C
x x C x
x C x x
*Note:
Translation: "I love you very much, let us marry and you will have my babies?"
(or something like that, I'm not so good with words like this)
Labels: Love Poem, Personal-Challenge-2017, Poem, Real Toads, Syllabic Form
5 Comments:
Very well done. Sweet and a little.
Hah! I really like this, with that punch line at the end especially. It made me laugh and yes, very sweet. "Skies'd confirm a long-term match." :)
You did well here. That last line was a pleasant surprise 😊
Love this, Jim! I need to re-work mine ~~ did NOT manage the rhyme aspect at all.
This is absolutely delightful!! :)
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