One Single Impression: Thirst
A Thirst
He came in quest of a drink
his terrible thirst to quench.
Leavings from the kitchen sink
were offered him by the wench.
I need a drink, not that slop
was his retort 'side the door.
Impudent trash you churl rot
that I'd drink in Hell before.
Poor soul quite a needless spat,
back out in the rain he fell.
Gasping for life and a draft,
he died of thirst in the hail.
Fall from Heaven, life's sweet wine;
that hail as grapes in the rain.
O had he drank from that vine
no longer he'd thirst in vain.
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Labels: Humor(?), One Single Impression, Poem, Rhyme, Syllabic Form
posted by Jim @ 9/13/2009 12:03:00 AM
20 comments
20 Comments:
My favourite line:
"he died of thirst in the hail"
Excellent.
nice to know there is always at least one open door.
wonderful poem.
Spirithelpers
A great take on thirst. some clever lines in this.
Yes, Jim .. this is a poor fellow, but you represented thirst well.
Are you alright?
That's getting a drink the hard way, Jim! Thanks for this.
I like the mood created by the down-home language!
I loved the rhyming!
inside, outside, which side
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"As the deer pants for the water..."
This is a nice poem, Mr Jim =)
the rain........I love that!
When living for the wine from grapes, a person will still have a thirst after the belly is full.
It can not satisfy the deep thirst which is born before a person is formed of clay.
Sounds like the lyrics to an old 1890's ballad, Jim! Something that they might get up and sing in the old concert halls while they are serving whiskey!
Well now!
You always come up with a different angle, Jim--quite enjoyed this one!
good one Jim!
I will be posting in couple of minutes..you might want to laugh at it..
shraddha
sometimes what we need is right in front of us & we are too stubborn to see/accept it! brilliant!
Very clever - loved this one...
Lovely image and poem
Jim, I just love it. I great take on the prompt. Wonderful.
love-Melanie
there's all kinds of thirst aren't there, Jim, and all kinds of thirst quenchers!
So sad Jim; quite maudlin...but I loved the rhyme and story!!!
Thanks for sharing this poem with me. I love the rhyme and flow. Nicely written.
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