Sunday, July 12, 2009

One Single Impression: Thinking


Thinking, one

thinking all the time
I've been thinking to myself
'bout something special
[cat is being awfully smug
since he ate the canary]

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Auguste Rodin's, The Thinker
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Thinking, two

I've been thinking of times we had;
places we went, nice life we lived,
and joys we shared. Thinking about you.

Been thinking of the home we made;
the house we found, children we have,
and the love we had. Thinking about us.

I've been thinking now that you've gone;
what did I do, where have you been?
I'm alone. Thinking about you and me.

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Thinking, three

I've been thinking a lot of thoughts;
stay here alone, eat by myself;
could you come back? Been thinking about it?

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Thinking, four

I've been thinking a lot of thoughts.
So dearly we loved each other.
Oh would that you had not died.


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27 Comments:

At Saturday, July 11, 2009 11:42:00 PM, Blogger Geraldine said...

I'm wondering who you are writing about Jim. I've scrolled down the first page of your blog, not clear who this is written about. So sad to read...hope it's just thoughts you had, not something that actually happened.

 
At Saturday, July 11, 2009 11:49:00 PM, Blogger Jim said...

Geraldine, Heavens no, especially the last is not a part of my life story (except for my Mom, MIL, and a few more than casual, i.e. good, some very good, friends).

Guys, please do remember that I am always experimenting with my 'poems.' Remember when I put my disclaimer at the bottom? My removing those lines didn't mean that I had graduated.
..

 
At Saturday, July 11, 2009 11:52:00 PM, Anonymous The Dark Lord said...

The poem touches one in profound ways.. Heartfelt and tragic, it laments on the times that were.. Death is irrevocable.. It always leaves us woefully underprepared to face it.. be it of our own or of somebody we love.. We can merely sit back to reflect upon the loss.. and take comfort from the good times that had been...

 
At Saturday, July 11, 2009 11:54:00 PM, Anonymous The Dark Lord said...

Ah.. reassuring to see it doesnt concern you..
Oh, I almost forgot to thank you for this wonderful prompt!! Quite a challenge to the OSI poets, I daresay.. will be interesting to see what people come up with this one!

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 12:27:00 AM, Blogger Mojo said...

Hey Jim, thanks for stopping by. I didn't get "death" but "separation" from this. Granted one can feel an awful lot like the other to those left behind, but when the speaker is asking questions like "what did I do" I get that (one single) impression.

To respond to your comment, mine could actually be about any of several people and I really hope you're (and by extension, I'm) right. But that's where the "Thinking" (or perhaps "over-thinking") comes in.

Couldn't pass up a prompt like this one. Not with the number of times I've gotten myself in trouble for "thinking too much". It was a natural.

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 1:03:00 AM, Blogger Greyscale Territory said...

Layers of sensitive sadnesses here being peeled away and open to the glare of light! Beautiful!

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 2:04:00 AM, Blogger Edward S Gault said...

Thank you for the prompt this week!
I also dealt withb the Great Thinker( Great minds think alike).
I enjoyed all your poems.

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 2:32:00 AM, Blogger anthonynorth said...

Deep thoughts in these, ending with a beautifully poignant touch.

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 5:26:00 AM, Blogger SandyCarlson said...

An incredible sequence. You created loneliness through words and made it palpable. These poems make me realize being alone is not my thing.

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 5:39:00 AM, Blogger spacedlaw said...

So sad (except the first one, ifone is not a canary).

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 7:21:00 AM, Blogger Fledgling Poet said...

This is so heartfelt, and has such a yearning to it...I could feel the loneliness of this person as they lived on without their loved one. Beautifully done!

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 8:08:00 AM, Blogger indicaspecies said...

I'm touched by this poignant poetry. Wonderfully expressed!

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 9:20:00 AM, Anonymous lissa said...

they'll very provoking, I found myself feeling a bit down after reading the last one

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 10:06:00 AM, Blogger Maggie said...

Jim,
I enjoyed reading about all your thinking and I sure hope the cat doen not get indigestion from eating the canary...

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 10:51:00 AM, Blogger Sue said...

I love the way you are able to put yourself into the mind of another, you are a great writer of fiction, even if it is in the form of poetry!

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 4:17:00 PM, Anonymous Naraa Malone said...

I know a loss of someone special gets my brain turning in so many circles that I long for it to just shut up. thank you for the great prompt. I had fun with it.

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 7:02:00 PM, Anonymous if said...

very nice to read that...!

 
At Sunday, July 12, 2009 8:15:00 PM, Blogger Tumblewords: said...

Nice work - loved the prompt... your words are always a joy to read...

 
At Monday, July 13, 2009 2:31:00 AM, Blogger Amias said...

How utterly beautiful, these train of thoughts --- wraps one whole life into a wonderful web of what was verses what is verses what could have been, and the thoughts that bridge them are amazing Jim! This is indeed a profound and thought provoking web of communication you have created here!

No way I would have missed this prompt --- even if my hand had frozen in place, I would have found a way to post something on a prompt that governs my entire life "thinking" -- I believe without thought nothing was or could be created, as has been proven by everything I know as life, ... "in the beginning was the word ..."

You did yourself proud, Jim. Thank you for such a wonderful inspiring prompt that made me feel good, not just sharing it, but first experiencing it so that I may share it.

Yes, I am feeling so much better these days, thank goodness!

 
At Monday, July 13, 2009 5:20:00 AM, Blogger DeLi said...

i find 'em all sweet and softlike

 
At Monday, July 13, 2009 8:09:00 AM, Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I liked all. Those convey different thoughts to me.

that thin line

 
At Tuesday, July 14, 2009 9:52:00 AM, Blogger Patois said...

Thank you for the prompt and thank you for such fine offerings. Definitely glad it is not you experiencing this despair.

 
At Tuesday, July 14, 2009 11:22:00 AM, Blogger Leo said...

wow Jim...
u r thinking a lot! :)

thanks for the prompt!
and the "thinking, two" was my favorite! it was beautiful!

 
At Tuesday, July 14, 2009 5:35:00 PM, Anonymous gabrielle said...

Wonderful contemplation of the intricate layers of lives joined and separated. I’m glad to hear you haven’t personally experienced a tragic loss such as this and am impressed by your empathic abilities. The sense of loneliness is palpable.

Thanks for the prompt. It has inspired some beautiful work.

 
At Tuesday, July 14, 2009 7:15:00 PM, Blogger Patti said...

Jim~ those are sad!!! But they are GOOD!!- You especially captured such poignant feelings in the second one. Thanks for inspiring with this prompt! Also thank you for the kind words on my post- I really appreciate it. It is a family issue so it is bound to not be pretty~

 
At Wednesday, July 15, 2009 10:18:00 AM, Blogger SandyCarlson said...

Sorry Mr. Linky bailed. I will ask Andree, who is the techie at OSI.

 
At Wednesday, July 15, 2009 9:22:00 PM, Blogger gabrielle said...

Thoughts are the parents of feelings. I can see the edges softening.

 

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