Sunday, July 26, 2009

One Single Impression: Fragrance

Fragrance



God's gift to the nose
sweet aroma hurts my throat
God's curse to my skin

ex smoker confess
Gods curses are worse by far
than words of ex wife

bane of eczema
itching scratching rash--perfume
he's allergic to



Copyright © 2009 Jimmiehov. All Rights Reserved

Find more poems at One Single Impression
"Fragrance" as prompt,
suggested by Geraldine of
My Poetic Path

Pictures are mine from a tapas bar and mimes
on the street in Barcelona, Spain

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24 Comments:

At Saturday, July 25, 2009 10:46:00 PM, Blogger gautami tripathy said...

Second one is superb!

clutch your fragrance to myself

 
At Saturday, July 25, 2009 11:11:00 PM, Anonymous The Dark Lord said...

Awesome verses there!! Loved reading every one of them.. Being a smoker, the second verse was quite prominent!

 
At Saturday, July 25, 2009 11:16:00 PM, Blogger Maggie said...

I know what you mean about the perfumes...loved them when I was younger but now they make me suffer if I am around them...I even use unsented detergents and other products.

Would you believe I can not be around any kinds of sprays for insects.

...and as for smoke, I am an ex-smoker but it chokes me up to be around smoke now.

I wonder...is this one of the rewards of reaching the so called, golden ages??? ...:)

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 12:16:00 AM, Blogger Tammie Lee said...

There are not too many perfumes or smokes I can handle either.

Spirithelpers

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 1:45:00 AM, Blogger spacedlaw said...

I feel for you. Being allergic is really a curse.

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 3:06:00 AM, Blogger anthonynorth said...

I can't decide which I liked best here. I guess they were all excellent.

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 7:56:00 AM, Blogger Sweetest in the Gale said...

The older I get, the less I can tolerate perfumes or smoke. So I can most definitely relate to your words! Great read. :~)

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 9:48:00 AM, Blogger Sue said...

black humor!

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 11:28:00 AM, Blogger Geraldine said...

I am a stanch ANTI-smoker, thanks Jim!

Glad you enjoyed the prompt, interesting interpretations.

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 7:25:00 PM, Blogger SandyCarlson said...

These together create a hemmed in feeling and make me think of a friend who is allergic to everything.

 
At Sunday, July 26, 2009 11:48:00 PM, Blogger shraddha said...

fantastic

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 12:06:00 AM, Blogger gabrielle said...

dark humor indeed. I enjoyed these all , especially the second.

Thank you for your visit to Wild Goose. Sorry the verse disturbed Return and your feathers will be smoothed, I hope.

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 5:21:00 AM, Blogger Amias said...

I can relate to this Jim, because I have the same allergies. Funny, when I am in Georgia I don't seem to be bothered as much ... but here in the oil state --- ouch! I couldn't have said it better.

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 6:07:00 AM, Blogger qualcosa di bello said...

ooohhh, a real twist on how i imagined this prompt!

an elderly cousin of my mother's once told me how terribly allergic she was to many perfumes & how difficult it was for her to get out, even to church because of this. it convinced me to stop wearing any perfume (& thankfully i was not wearing it that day either).

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 7:55:00 AM, Blogger Jim said...

In addition to these ailments (and other cardiovascular and muscular aging situations) my colonoscopy doctor (interologist) has taken me off nuts. These sumptuous and healthy fruits de forest are now a no-no for me.
..
Caveat Emptor: The above situation is true. Not everything I tell in my 'poems' alluding to personal situations are true for me, Jim.
There is also another fictional 'me' lurking in the back of my mind who sometimes directs my writing thoughts for first person tales.
..

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 12:48:00 PM, Anonymous lissa said...

I like the second one, one cannot never dodge's one nature and the after affect

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 3:25:00 PM, OpenID fourwindshaiga said...

I don't have allergies, but my husband does. These days, I buy unscented products and leave off the perfume in respect for people who are bothered by it.

Your poem fits a lot of us.

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 4:36:00 PM, Blogger Quiet Paths said...

These were fun but allergies of any kind are not! Very clever, Jim.

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 6:24:00 PM, Anonymous Bobbie said...

Love both of these! Relate so much to the allergies lol.

 
At Monday, July 27, 2009 9:27:00 PM, Blogger Tumblewords: said...

For sure, this is a good rash of haiku! :)

 
At Tuesday, July 28, 2009 6:16:00 AM, Anonymous Lynne said...

GEJ (That's Green-Eyed Jim),
Your second stanza I hit me hard even though I don't have an ex. You see, I DO have horrid allergies that make life a challenge, meaning I want to say "miserable", but try to look at the bright side. I'm sorry you also battle those allergies that are more than "annoyances" some uninformed people feel "that is all it is" and it's so NOT! We know, unfortunately.

I'm allergic to perfume, too (and aftershave, room deodorizer...and the list goes on.) I'm like Maggie in the comment thread, except I'v had this ALL my life, since a baby, not merely in my adult years, plus I haven't smoked, can't smoke, and am also allergic to smoke. (I respect those like you who have quit; it's VERY hard, as I know from friends and family.)

As for eczema, I'm sorry you have that. I inherited that, too. Luckily, it goes in cycles. My skin is so sensitive that's a book, not a blog post! Terrific "one single impression."

 
At Tuesday, July 28, 2009 12:23:00 PM, Blogger Poetikat said...

I know this is about scent, but it's the sounds in your piece that have me captivated - ex smoker, ex wife, eczema, itch,scratch, rash, "gic". Really enjoyed this!

Kat

 
At Wednesday, July 29, 2009 3:46:00 PM, Blogger Patti said...

great poems- I am not allergic but am itching as I write this (power of suggestion perhaps). I LOVE perfume and would hate it if I could not wear it- I am careful with it for those who are allergic.

 
At Saturday, August 01, 2009 3:28:00 PM, Anonymous if said...

your humor is nice!

 

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