Saturday, August 28, 2021

Sunday Muse - Jack and Jill


    The Deed 


What have we done 

A moment, an hour 

A time we will always remember 

Tender memories not to be forgotten 

Even if the shame must remain 

All is stored in our hearts

Stored for savoring 



    The Pills 

Jack and Jill sat on a wall 

Jill fell off and broke her toe 

Along came Mr. Devil 

Here to rescue, Doctor Doe 

Doctor doctor help me please 

Glued the toe gave her some pills 

Don't eat these, make you a tease 

She slipped Jack one, ease your ills 

Jack jumped down came on strong 

Jill tease to be was surprised 

Oh Jack I've waited so long 

Now I've found the best of guys 

Came Mr. Devil again 

Pay up, Doc Doe's pill bargain 

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 - Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2021, All Rights Reserved 

 - See Carrie's prompt photo for The Sunday Muse # 175,  at 

 - stored also in The Writer's Pantry with Rosemary at

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At Sunday, August 29, 2021 3:46:00 AM, Blogger Sumana Roy said...

A lovely read, Jim. The three characters are interesting.

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 8:22:00 AM, Blogger C. Sandlin said...

Interesting play set-up.

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 10:49:00 AM, Blogger indybev said...

Methinks Jack and Jill need a de-pill-atory!

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 11:25:00 AM, Blogger Naledi said...

I love the dark twist to a child-like tale!

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 11:33:00 AM, Blogger Truedessa said...

Now, I have this song lyric looping in my head. Interesting take on the prompt.

"no pills gonna cure my ill"

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 11:40:00 AM, Blogger Helen said...

Tender memories + shame ... now that would be a shame. Cherish is a lovely word.

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 1:29:00 PM, Blogger Sunita said...

The first poem was sweet and the second one added a twist to the whole story :)

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 2:06:00 PM, Blogger robkistner said...

Such lyrical darkness Jim — excellent take on the prompt.

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 8:04:00 PM, Blogger phillip woodruff (jalopy dreams) said...

a twisted fairytale for sure jim. there is a pill for everything isn't there? a very interesting commentary, enjoyed this very much

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 8:05:00 PM, Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

These contrasting yet complementary pieces made an interesting read. I particularly liked the twist-in-the-tail in each version.

At Sunday, August 29, 2021 9:00:00 PM, Blogger qbit said...

That last bit with the Doc and the pills and Jill and Jack out and the Devil's in. Do they all come tumbling down in the end?

At Monday, August 30, 2021 3:59:00 PM, Blogger Susie Clevenger said...

Oh you took Jack and Jill down a dark spill. Love it!

At Monday, August 30, 2021 7:57:00 PM, Blogger said...

Love these characters, Jim!

At Wednesday, September 01, 2021 8:51:00 AM, Blogger Marion Horton said...

I wonder what Mother Goose would have to say about this version? 😄 Very entertaining.


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