Tuesday, February 13, 2024

Lilac bouquet Valentine -- a piece of prose and a poem for dVerse Prosery

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        Image by Julia Butsykina on Unsplash

I know today is for prose.  I am trying to learn how to write hip hop poetry and don't get much help, even from Google.  

If any of you readers have written hip hop poetry you could leave me a helpful comment below. 

Here's my attempt, today's prompt words are the title and first and second lines:


    '…city lilacs 

    release their sweet, wild perfume 
    then bow down, heavy with rain.’ 
    a purple bouquet for you 
    one I cut for you with pain 

    there's much love mixed with my blood 
    mixed in with shiny petals 
    bright red and a bit of mud 
    all from lack of parasol 

    city lilacs traffic dust 
    purple pieces with my red 
    different than the country ones 
    fresh and clean and pure it's said 

    I cut myself with my knife 
    your Valentine worth the price 
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Pretty well does it for now.
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 - Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2024, all rights reserved
 - I am linked with Kim at dVerse Prosery at          https://dversepoets.com/2024/02/12/prosery-city-lilacs/ 
 - Click here to read other writers' works using Kim's prompt lines find.  We are to use 144 words, no less.  Mine, including the ditty has 144.
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2 Comments:

At Wednesday, February 14, 2024 1:40:00 AM, Blogger Kim M. Russell said...

I so enjoyed your Valentine’s rap, Jim! You’ve got the rhythm, the attitude and the rhymes, especially the pain, the love mixed with blood, petals ‘bright red and a bit of mud’, and the final couplet. However, as this prompt is for Prosery, I will have to remove your post from Mister Linky and ask you to add it to Open Link on Thursday, which is being hosted by Sanaa. How about joining us for Open Link Live?

 
At Wednesday, February 14, 2024 10:38:00 AM, Anonymous Jim said...

Thanks, Kim, yes you must keep things propper. An aside, I don't use prose too well. Probably the "poem" name doesn't count Habians either due to the Senyru endings. I was worried that my prose part wasn't enough, I trimmed it to satisfy the 144 limit.
I'll keep the poem, try it solo elsewhere with a short note. I liked it hip hop or not.
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