Sunday Muse -- The wrong train
Feelings
Ever feel like you took the wrong train
My train is going to Panama
My ticket says "California"
I'm riding on the unhooked caboose
It's caught on fire burning at the rear
Feel I'm not long for this crazy world
Can't see behind, mirrors smoked gone blind
Fire burns faster caboose on the loose
Bear's plight as well, I ate it last night
Happens often we're extinction bound
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- Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2021, All Rights Reserved
- Photo prompt posted by Carrie Van Horn with The Sunday Muse #166, at http://thesundaymuse.blogspot.com/2021/06/sunday-muse-166.html?m=1
- I had started another poem to post but got off track of a thorough and fairly quick to my intended ending. I hadn't made up my mind either at to it's tense.
- My short replacement poem is is here,
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Labels: Animals, F Person, Poem, Sunday Muse, Syllabic Form
posted by Jim @ 6/26/2021 01:03:00 PM
11 comments
11 Comments:
Jim, I'm not going to get "Ridin' on the City of New Orleans" out of my brain today. This poem triggered the music, one of my favorites. Brava!!!!
That is a powerful image, the caboose on fire in the rear...........good one, Jim.
Sometimes you're the ant and sometimes you're the shoe. And sometimes you're riding on an unhooked caboose. Good luck, Jim!
This reads like a dream that wakes you up cold in the early morning. And the horror of on-coming consumer/fire...a perfect image.
Am I the only one who sees a great line for a country song ---- "the loose caboose"! (Sorry, Jim, sometimes my mind just wanders off somewhere!! lol)
So glad there are no edible bears around here - but even if there were, I wouldn't want to eat one! LOL
Powerful writing...a scary vision, but filled with truth.
The Extinction Express -- And if you managed to get off that train, where does that leave you? Entropy Junction?
'extinction bound'... Hope not!
The last line...that sums up everything.
Perfect summation at the end. Love this, Jim!
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