Was it real? -- a Tuesday Platform Challenge poem inspired by Poe
I had a dream, or was it real You slipped away without a kiss
Is this the way that we should part
Did you carry a bit of me
A piece of my heart you might keep
A grain like sand stuck to your foot
When I waken will you be here
Head on my pillow like before
If I changed my dream you'd be there
I'll not brush your feet if you've stayed
Those sandy feet, one has a grain
that could be me, piece of my heart
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Today I'm linked with Kerry O'Conner at withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2015/07/the-tuesday-platform_14.html
Kerry related to Edgar Allen Poe's poem, Dream within a dream, and suggested as an optional challenge to write our thoughts after reading it. Mine is here.
You can read Poe's dream poem here. www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/237388. Please do.
Labels: Flirty Guy, Personal-Challenge-2015, Poem, Syllabic Form, Tuesday Platform
posted by Jim @ 7/14/2015 06:46:00 AM
13 comments
13 Comments:
We often have dreams which seem so real.. Excellent write :)
I love the love that emanates from this piece. You are a true romantic, Jim! have a wonderful Tuesday!
This feels very real. Like Sanaa says, these dreams do happen. Nicely written indeed. :)
Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason
I had a dream so real last night. I heard Raf calling me. I answered aloud - twice! It woke me up. Don't remember the dream, though!
This is quite a mystical poem, Jim. The questioning tone raises some questions about a possible back story.
Poe inspired you well! This is lovely, Jim, and a bit of a departure from your usual style (which I also like very much, btw).
This is a very sweet poem--a new favorite of yours - they are many sweet, but this has a kind of vulnerability that works super well. Thanks. k.
This is great, Jim. I just love it, love. It perfectly describes loss, the aching of loss. Love.
Cool!
Thanks for visiting.
A poem about love and loss. Enjoyed it !
luv your little smiling bee; and your spelling of such delights on awakening from dreamland
im happy you dropped by my blog verses and left your thoughts
my night poem is #94 at the blog - Wednesday July8th
http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2015/07/94.html
much love...
That imagery of the bit of your heart being of no more consequence than a stray bit of sand - heartbreaking.
Hi Jim, just dropping in to say hi. Been a long time since I've read one of your delightful poems. I'm kind of getting back into it since One Single Impression out. Wondering if anyone else is doing these kind of prompts.
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