Sunday, July 05, 2015

No help at all -- Flash 55 Poetry


Ate another's bread
Taste not worthy to my tongue
Salted with his sweat

Walked another's path
Rock strewn, pits and snares abound
Stumbled, bruised my bod

Breathless going up
Up and down, steep was his stair
Tumbled each down step

Bear his load I'll not
Heavy, back cracking, I can't
Walked his walk for naught
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Poem copyright, Jimmiehov - All Rights Reserved

Today I'm linked with Kerry O'Conner in the Imaginary Garden
withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2015/07/flash-55-plus.html
Her instructions for writing a 55 word poem are there

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9 Comments:

At Sunday, July 05, 2015 5:30:00 AM, Blogger Kerry O'Connor said...

I like the way you took your inspiration from the Dante quote, Jim. You did a very good job of providing a new perspective on the lines.

 
At Sunday, July 05, 2015 5:33:00 AM, Blogger brudberg said...

So often we take without giving - failing on reciprocity is indeed a strong fallacy

 
At Sunday, July 05, 2015 8:33:00 AM, Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Well done!

 
At Sunday, July 05, 2015 9:40:00 AM, Blogger Sanaa Rizvi said...

Excellent write :D

 
At Sunday, July 05, 2015 12:59:00 PM, Blogger Other Mary said...

Jim, this is rather brilliant.

 
At Sunday, July 05, 2015 3:34:00 PM, Blogger Outlawyer said...

A really interesting poem, Jim--a deep sense of irony here, so succinctly expressed. Thanks. k.

 
At Sunday, July 05, 2015 5:30:00 PM, Blogger Marian said...

Interesting, Jim, thought provoking. I hope that is your door stop!

 
At Wednesday, July 08, 2015 1:29:00 PM, Blogger Sue in the Wood said...

Great imagery!

 
At Wednesday, July 08, 2015 2:32:00 PM, Blogger Susie Clevenger said...

Such an honest piece. We can't walk in the shoes and path of another, but we can leave our footprints beside him/her.

 

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