Out of the Standard Challenge
Sister, Do You Love
Your Brother?
Half dressed,
bathroom duties called him
But when he flushed
all Hell began
Water was gushing
everywhere
Pulled the thing off
the wall instead
Water stopped, why he
didn’t know
‘Twas his sister’s
house, should he tell?
Raining now, polished
theme was due
Half mile, sister
wouldn’t drive him
Walk in rain? No way,
he’s retired
Too deep in spots, detours
abound
Call his sister? He
may come back
And hope she’d
forgiven his mess
(Very loud) "Ring, ring." . .. I was 'he'.
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Photos and Poem Copyright, © 2014 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved
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Today I'm linked with Isadora Gruye at the Real Toads, Out of Standard (link)
Izzy's Real Toad post today was entitled, You could have done better....Out of Standard (link--same as above). Her challenge instructions were short and direct, "Write a poem or piece of fiction which encapsulates a lie you could have told better." The above is all a lie, it is a dream I had early this morning, just before I woke up. I left out a lot, and embellished some a bit.
There was water still coming when the scene changed to leaving for school, from the bottom pipes and from the wall cabinet above. We weren't headed for school when Sis said no ride, but rather were trying to leave for our home. Seemed the whole world was flooded. My dream didn't get us back to her house but we were thinking about that.
Seems a lot of my dreams about my missing either a class or a day at the University of Nebraska (I at one time had a recurring dream like this) . I did miss a lot of classes because I was someplace playing chess instead. Maybe that's why I dream these kind of dreams.
Labels: Jim's Life, Personal-Challenge-2014, Poem, Real Toads, Syllabic Form
9 Comments:
Tall tale is closely related to lying! This seems funny now, but if even a piece of it happened--poor panicky little one. (Except I would be furious he didn't get me to clean it right away.)
I think I would have preferred your dream to the dream I had early this morning ~~ truly terrifying. And what I deserve for watching the season finale of HBO's "The Leftovers" before turning in!
I like to read dream meanings...here's one for water: http://www.astrology.com/dreams/water-flood/2-d-r-154640
Water dreaming. Did you wake in a wet bed? ;-)
so busted ~
What an awful feeling! I hate dreams like that.
I had one of those dreams too ~ Luckily it was never about flooding or getting water messing the place ~
I've recurring dreams too, Dr & Mrs Jim :) The most common one is about the bathrooms in the university hostel.
Ah, very creative spin to my challenge, Jim....once again you bring to the page, a story woven so tightly, I find myself wanting to read more. Well done and viva la!
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