Wednesday, May 21, 2014

Pathetic fallacy

Runaway

Crouching below the window, 
she cowered in reeking horror
The wind was voracious, 
the skies were screeching lightening bugs,
Giants' tools,  searchlight effect.  

"Oh pray that none ever finds me"
Was her sobbing cry.  
Between crashing thunder claps our girl vowed
She vowed to leave this place,     
Mother Nature prevailed, she'd go home

Poem copyright, 2014 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved

Today I'm linked to the Real Toads, Kerry Says (link)

Kerry tells that 'pathetic fallacy' is a literary term for the attributing of human emotion and conduct to all aspects within nature.  I.e. leaves dance, dogs laugh, or when rocks seem indifferent. We should try this, I did a little here.

11 Comments:

At Wednesday, May 21, 2014 6:27:00 PM, Blogger Sherry Blue Sky said...

You have painted a vivid scene, the storm, the wind, the thunder, her fear. Well done.

 
At Wednesday, May 21, 2014 8:34:00 PM, Blogger Lolamouse said...

I can feel the horror of the "voracious wind" and the fear of this poor girl. Nicely done!

 
At Thursday, May 22, 2014 8:25:00 AM, Blogger Kerry O'Connor said...

The voracious winds and screeching skies certainly add to the mood of fear and confusion. Thanks for participating in the Wednesday Challenge, Jim.

 
At Thursday, May 22, 2014 9:05:00 AM, OpenID razzamadazzle said...

You've definitely created a sense of mood in this piece. Very fearful.

 
At Thursday, May 22, 2014 9:19:00 AM, OpenID ccchampagne said...

There is something both scary and oddly comforting about this write. But most of all I think it's beautiful!

 
At Thursday, May 22, 2014 9:41:00 AM, Blogger Sumana Roy said...

a soul hiding fearful of that searchlight...love this scene so beautifully sketched adding a bit mystery too...

 
At Thursday, May 22, 2014 11:25:00 AM, Blogger Helen said...

Voracious, screeching, crashing ~~~ words well used!

 
At Thursday, May 22, 2014 11:34:00 PM, Blogger Margaret said...

"skies were screeching lightening bugs," … as a young girl I was terrified of lightening bugs… this line reminded me of that.

 
At Friday, May 23, 2014 12:33:00 AM, Blogger audrey` said...

"Her sobbing cry" in the midst of the very bad weather... She needs urgent help very quickly, Dr Jim.

Very well written, Dr Jim :)

 
At Friday, May 23, 2014 1:55:00 AM, OpenID grapeling said...

rocks are rather indifferent, aren't they? ~

 
At Saturday, May 24, 2014 5:36:00 AM, Blogger Jinksy said...

The wind was voracious...

Luckily, it must have spat you out again?! LOL

 

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