Sunday, March 07, 2010

One Single Impression: Hesitation (Monet's home pictured)

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Hesitation
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He came around back
and rang at her gate.
Oh my love you're here
please do come right in.

Hesitated step
still not in the gate.
Yes, yes, lift the latch
you silly boy you.

Through the gate he stepped
closed it tight behind.
That's the good lad now,
come, Daddy is out.

Don't knock, the neighbors
will hear the dogs' bark.
Door was at the back
up the steps he went.

Halted on the stair
timid now she was.
Hesitant again,
our lad turned and ran.

End Act One. Now a short intermission.



Poem and photo
Copyright © 2010 Jimmiehov
All Rights Reserved

Artist Claude Monet's Home is located at Giverny, France (link). We visited there in Spring, 2009.

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Find more poems at One Single Impression
"Hesitation" as prompt was suggested
by SpacedLaw at
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18 Comments:

At Sunday, March 07, 2010 12:32:00 AM, Blogger Amity said...

What a beautiful stage play, hesitation well portrayed...:)

Oh these little kids seemed to want to venture into some prohibited acts...:)

Very nice and exciting use of the prompt JIm, the girl was just as naive.

Or was it a teenage experience? I would like to guess it is so!

Mine is just up Jim!!!

Have a great week ahead.

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 3:35:00 AM, Blogger anthonynorth said...

A wonderful piece. I guess they thought the intermission was needed.

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 5:14:00 AM, Blogger Stan Ski said...

Truth or dare?

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 6:10:00 AM, Blogger Loch Rob said...

Jim, you got me thinking about a couple of moments like that in my own past. Mostly in my youth, when insecurity overpowers most other emotions. Great imagery in your poem too. I can see the young lad heading up to the house in your picture.

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 7:40:00 AM, Blogger Sweetest in the Gale said...

I loved your take on this prompt...you caught the act of hesitation in a very clear way. Wonderful!

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 9:25:00 AM, Blogger Robin said...

Youth caught in the act of...fear and hesitation. Great one!

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 4:45:00 PM, Blogger Sandra (if) said...

I love this ...so sweet and true..!

 
At Sunday, March 07, 2010 8:16:00 PM, Blogger SandyCarlson said...

Innocence wins another round!

 
At Monday, March 08, 2010 9:02:00 PM, Blogger The Write Girl said...

This is such a fun little play you've written here. I love the hesitant boy. Nicely written.

 
At Monday, March 08, 2010 9:31:00 PM, Blogger Tumblewords: said...

What fun! Glad for the hesitation. I'd never seen Monet's home. Thanks!

 
At Monday, March 08, 2010 11:06:00 PM, Anonymous Andree said...

Oh I hope you are going to continue this in the future! You had my total attention and I want more!

 
At Tuesday, March 09, 2010 7:46:00 AM, Blogger spacedlaw said...

Lovely hesitation tango.

 
At Tuesday, March 09, 2010 9:26:00 AM, Blogger Cassiopeia Rises said...

Wonderful Jim. It sounds like you. I wonder what will be in the next part?


Melanie

 
At Tuesday, March 09, 2010 3:46:00 PM, Anonymous one more believer said...

loved that jim.. i was intrigued by the intermission angle too in an offbeat sorta way... whats that song young love...i can hear the chorus now....hey, that foto love it...there's no snow...

 
At Wednesday, March 10, 2010 7:03:00 PM, Blogger Patti said...

such hesitation...am curious about the next act!

 
At Wednesday, March 10, 2010 10:20:00 PM, Blogger Felisol said...

A beautiful poem, dear Jim.
You are a man of many skills.
This one I particularly admire.
From Felisol

 
At Friday, March 12, 2010 10:23:00 AM, Anonymous Julie said...

I can feel the hesitation!

 
At Friday, March 12, 2010 11:35:00 AM, Blogger gabrielle said...

Such a tender chapter! And what a lovely setting for the story to unfold.

 

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