Going to Mars
If I were on a spaceship
Going to Mars
I'd miss some niceties
Spitting out the window and
Let fresh air in
Pretty sunsets be no more
Or stars at night
Because there would be no night
Nor bright sunrise
How would I count the days
That
We'd be apart
Wonder if they'd let me drive
Pass by your house
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- Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2019, All Rights Reserved
- I'm linked with Magaly Guerrero in the Imaginary Garden at http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2019/02/weekend-mini-challenge-strange-news.html?m=1
- I had a 55 word version but now it's 60 words plus three for the title.
Labels: Flash Writing, Love Poem, Science, Sunday-Mini-Challenge, Toads
posted by Jim @ 2/16/2019 12:28:00 PM
14 comments
14 Comments:
I bet he'll be able to stop by, to visit his sweetheart. Love always finds a way. Even on the way to Mars. :-)
May there be a way to make a detour, or at least a swift return. Space is probably a very boring place
A lot of the normal niceties and joys will be missed. Appreciate your humor, Dr Jim!
Hank
Shades of H G Wells and Edgar Rice Burroughs and their trips to the moon and Mars!
When I read your poem, Jim, the song ‘Fly me to the Moon’ popped into my head. Let me know what spring is like on Jupiter and Mars – and don’t forget to wave when you pass my house!
How I remember the thrill of walking or cycling by a cute girl's (from school) house hoping I could catch sight of her out of school hours. Mind you none of them ever lived in outer space!
Ah, this is pretty cool, Jim! This bit made me feel all mushy and sweet: "How would I count the days/That/We'd be apart".
"Because there would be no night
Nor bright sunrise
How would I count the days
That
We'd be apart" …… How romantic
Oh, I'd hope they'd let you stop. Oh, yes, there needs to be light to count those missing days.
You could tip the nose of the craft, in homage. Good one, Jim!
How WOULD you count the days? That's a good question.
Ha. That is just lovely. I think that there would be sunsets on Mars and also stars at night, but not sure how they would look in a different atmosphere. But I loved the poignancy of the specifically missing the house of your friend--I'm guessing spouse--it's lovely. I am fine, Jim. Just working a lot at my job, and very tired. All best, k.
On this journey to Mars...anything's possible. Love the direction you took this in.
I love this! Mixing a love poem with sci-fi -- can't get any better than that.
Mary (Cactus Haiku)
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