Thursday Challenge Poem:
Retired is Good
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Why am I so tired? Stock answer is
"It doesn't matter, I am retired."
I would hate to have missed the fun of life
Remissed I would be to my family
My bones do not all carbon to relate
They've got Teflon, titanium, steel
Veins of mesh tubes to channel my red blood
Hoses for cars, water and things till late
Retired I am, proud of it, can't complain
Better than my friends. To me, Heaven sent
But now they're six feet under, absent all
Not a bad life, tired is no excuse
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Photo and Poem Copyright, © 2015 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved
(picture was taken last April in Key West, Florida--Remiss if you miss it)
This post is now linked with Kerry O'Connor at the Real Toads, The Tuesday Platform
I linked to the Real Toads and found Thursday's post,
get listed for February: Absent . There was the challenge:
- Grapeling's Challenge. It was "to select at least 2 of these pairs (below) - or come up with a pair of pairs of your own, words that share common spelling but not common meaning - and weave them into a *new* poem, however you please.
- The words: miss / remiss -- deem / redeem -- wager / dowager -- pulse / repulse -- file / defile -- peat / repeat -- sent / absent
I used "missed and remissed" and "sent and absent", then two of my own, "tired and retired" and "late and relate".
Labels: Jim's Life, Personal-Challenge-2015, Poem, Real Toads
posted by Jim @ 2/20/2015 11:58:00 PM
13 comments
13 Comments:
It sounds wonderful, and to be a little tired when you are retired sounds actually quite ok.
Well .. Mr. Jim, as a fellow retiree I love your poem!
I liked this but I'm reminded we don't bury them six feet under today, here it is four and a half.
Keep yourself active and engaged ~ Smiling back at your picture ~ hey, I can't wait to be retired after a long time ~
Clever! And you have time to unwind and rest. I sometimes have Sundays for that….
a well drawn paean to friends, Jim. thanks for adding your voice ~
What a great shot of you and your wife, Jim. I love it!
Your poem touches a chord - no point in complaining about slowing down, when each day is to be treasured.
It is wonderful that you are retired and appreciating it and enjoying it. It is a shame for those that work work work and do not make it to that time of life to enjoy.
Retired is good indeed. At least when we're tired we get to lie down! I enjoyed this, Jim. Love the photo, too. You have such a kind face.
One can take in the tiredness! Meant to be anyway, a reminder! Lest one tries to overdo things! One for the road, Dr Jim!
Hank
tired when retired is to me plain okay; i'm a retiree its all about my time is my time; luv this poem
much love...
A great pic, and clever use of the words, Jim--you have all kinds of materials serve double purposes as well--the mesh hoses we have naturally and that get put in! Thanks. Key West looks just beautiful! (Manicddaily)
Not too tired, I trust! I like to think of you and your happy life.:)
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