Rewind -- a Flash 55 Poem
Rewind
Oh to feel young again, her sigh
Thoughts of birds in the trees
Flowers in the gardenWearing sixteen bees
I'd like to run with the wind
Chase a butterfly, fall and get skinned
I'll beg your pardon
If I land on your toe
Please don't let me cry
Just wanna go. And go
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© 2015 Jimmiehov,
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I'm linked with Kerry O'Connor at the Real Toads, FLASH 55 PLUS
Kerry's instructions: " Write a piece of poetry or prose on a subject of your choice in precisely 55 WORDS ." She suggested a line word count and a rhyme scheme for a form she has devised. I used the rhyme scheme but not her word count. I did end up with 55 words counting the title.
LOL (Little Old Lady) picture from a friend's Facebook
Labels: Personal-Challenge-2015, Poem, Rhyme
posted by Jim @ 2/01/2015 12:26:00 AM
12 comments
12 Comments:
I read recently that adulthood is a myth - we remain children forever. The rhyme scheme worked really well in this poem, Jim.
I think we need to be children at all ages.. running with the sun and chasing butterflies sounds like a great way to spend a day. Much better than other grown-up toys that tend to burn fuel, and money.
Sure, keep the child in you alive and just go...and go ~ I believe its a matter of attitude ~
"Wearing sixteen bees..." such a sweet image.
Ah, youth is wasted on the young...as Shaw once said.
Must be this wistfulness in the air, because my poem also dealt with youth and aging. I will keep this verse close to my heart as spring comes. It is never too late to appreciate one's youth, even if it is passed!
Nice, Jim. I like the end especially.
Me too! At least I want to make some sense in all my movement. My ADHD has me going, but nowhere mostly. lol
Excellent.
I wouldn't mind wearing sixteen bees! Only I'd like to wear them at a bit of a distance! Ha. Thanks, Jim. k. (http://manicddaily.wordpress.com)
I like the subtle nature related words you use in this because it brought out the nature of a human being a bit more. We often stumble and fall at certain times, and I liked how you portrayed this.
Everyone is always young at heart, Dr & Mrs Jim :)
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