Saturday, February 11, 2012

One Single Impression: Vital





Vital; a review

His vital signs were slowing
he kept drifting off to sleep
Old Father Time's a going
keeps bringing up from the deep

Time long ago a young lad
playing outside with his toys
never thought of being bad
though soon he'd meet bigger boys

Indelible were the teens
memories weren't far away
his treasure was lost between
her mother's sheets in their play

Learning to drive dodged a cat
he took his mum for a ride
told her proudly hold your hat
"too old to spank" hurt his pride

Came along his love for life
courting her was fun and joy
then wedding bells and a fife
nine months later it's a boy

Happily ever after
they all lived until that day
tears prevail swallowed laughter
loved till death he went away
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Prompt word "Vital" was suggested by Harshad Mehta of The Space Within
For more poems using this prompt word please go to One Single Impression

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12 Comments:

At Saturday, February 11, 2012 11:41:00 PM, Blogger Geraldine said...

Oh so sweet and bittersweet too Jim...I like what you've done with this prompt.

Mine is at:

http://mypoeticpath.wordpress.com/2012/02/10/haiku-reflections-endless-love/

Mr. Linky isn't cooperating!

 
At Saturday, February 11, 2012 11:54:00 PM, Blogger Harshad mehta said...

This is too good, I think this is life and we have to enjoy it, tears too!

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 3:10:00 AM, Blogger audrey` said...

Thank you so much for your encouragement in the Facebook group "Bloggers on Facebook". We need to have a Facebook account in order to gain access to the group. I'm so sorry for the inconvenience, Dr Jim :)

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 3:29:00 AM, Blogger anthonynorth said...

This is excellent on every level.

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 5:36:00 AM, Blogger Sandra said...

nice review!!

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 8:35:00 AM, Blogger audrey` said...

Would you like me to add you onto the group "Bloggers on Facebook", Dr Jim? :)

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 5:01:00 PM, Anonymous mareymercy said...

Very sweet!

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 5:24:00 PM, Blogger Magical Mystical Teacher said...

There's both joy and sorrow in this poem, Jim--probably more of the latter--but that's the way life is, isn't it? We take the good and the bad and do with them the best we can...

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 8:30:00 PM, Blogger SandyCarlson said...

You capture the way life turns on a dime and turns again and again. And how joy and love are choices.

 
At Sunday, February 12, 2012 9:23:00 PM, Blogger The Write Girl said...

This is very touching Jim. You captured this man's life so beautifully. He feels so real. One of my favorites here Jim!

 
At Tuesday, February 14, 2012 10:22:00 AM, Blogger Lady In Read said...

like your take on the prompt.. life is what it is and we live it to the best we can! well told!

 
At Sunday, February 26, 2012 4:15:00 AM, Anonymous Madeleine Begun Kane said...

So sad and so lovely!

 

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