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Sunday, March 07, 2010

One Single Impression: Hesitation (Monet's home pictured)

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Hesitation
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He came around back
and rang at her gate.
Oh my love you're here
please do come right in.

Hesitated step
still not in the gate.
Yes, yes, lift the latch
you silly boy you.

Through the gate he stepped
closed it tight behind.
That's the good lad now,
come, Daddy is out.

Don't knock, the neighbors
will hear the dogs' bark.
Door was at the back
up the steps he went.

Halted on the stair
timid now she was.
Hesitant again,
our lad turned and ran.

End Act One. Now a short intermission.


Poem and photo
Copyright © 2010 Jimmiehov
All Rights Reserved

Artist Claude Monet's Home is located at Giverny, France (link). We visited there in Spring, 2009.

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18 comments:

  1. AmitySunday, March 07, 2010 12:32:00 AM

    What a beautiful stage play, hesitation well portrayed...:)

    Oh these little kids seemed to want to venture into some prohibited acts...:)

    Very nice and exciting use of the prompt JIm, the girl was just as naive.

    Or was it a teenage experience? I would like to guess it is so!

    Mine is just up Jim!!!

    Have a great week ahead.

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  2. anthonynorthSunday, March 07, 2010 3:35:00 AM

    A wonderful piece. I guess they thought the intermission was needed.

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  3. Stan SkiSunday, March 07, 2010 5:14:00 AM

    Truth or dare?

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  4. Loch RobSunday, March 07, 2010 6:10:00 AM

    Jim, you got me thinking about a couple of moments like that in my own past. Mostly in my youth, when insecurity overpowers most other emotions. Great imagery in your poem too. I can see the young lad heading up to the house in your picture.

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  5. Sherri B.Sunday, March 07, 2010 7:40:00 AM

    I loved your take on this prompt...you caught the act of hesitation in a very clear way. Wonderful!

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  6. RobinSunday, March 07, 2010 9:25:00 AM

    Youth caught in the act of...fear and hesitation. Great one!

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  7. Sandra.ifSunday, March 07, 2010 4:45:00 PM

    I love this ...so sweet and true..!

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  8. SandyCarlsonSunday, March 07, 2010 8:16:00 PM

    Innocence wins another round!

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  9. The Write GirlMonday, March 08, 2010 9:02:00 PM

    This is such a fun little play you've written here. I love the hesitant boy. Nicely written.

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  10. Tumblewords:Monday, March 08, 2010 9:31:00 PM

    What fun! Glad for the hesitation. I'd never seen Monet's home. Thanks!

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  11. AndreeMonday, March 08, 2010 11:06:00 PM

    Oh I hope you are going to continue this in the future! You had my total attention and I want more!

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  12. spacedlawTuesday, March 09, 2010 7:46:00 AM

    Lovely hesitation tango.

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  13. Cassiopeia RisesTuesday, March 09, 2010 9:26:00 AM

    Wonderful Jim. It sounds like you. I wonder what will be in the next part?


    Melanie

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  14. one more believerTuesday, March 09, 2010 3:46:00 PM

    loved that jim.. i was intrigued by the intermission angle too in an offbeat sorta way... whats that song young love...i can hear the chorus now....hey, that foto love it...there's no snow...

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  15. PattiWednesday, March 10, 2010 7:03:00 PM

    such hesitation...am curious about the next act!

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  16. Felisol Wednesday, March 10, 2010 10:20:00 PM

    A beautiful poem, dear Jim.
    You are a man of many skills.
    This one I particularly admire.
    From Felisol

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  17. JulieFriday, March 12, 2010 10:23:00 AM

    I can feel the hesitation!

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  18. gabrielleFriday, March 12, 2010 11:35:00 AM

    Such a tender chapter! And what a lovely setting for the story to unfold.

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