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Saturday, February 16, 2019

Going to Mars

If I were on a spaceship 
Going to Mars 

 I'd miss some niceties 
Spitting out the window and
Let fresh air in 
Pretty sunsets be no more 
Or stars at night 

 Because there would be no night 
Nor bright sunrise 
How would I count the days 
That 
We'd be apart 

 Wonder if they'd let me drive 
Pass by your house 
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 - Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2019, All Rights Reserved 
 - I'm linked with Magaly Guerrero in the Imaginary Garden at http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2019/02/weekend-mini-challenge-strange-news.html?m=1 
 - I had a 55 word version but now it's 60 words plus three for the title. 
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14 comments:

  1. Magaly GuerreroSaturday, February 16, 2019 12:41:00 PM

    I bet he'll be able to stop by, to visit his sweetheart. Love always finds a way. Even on the way to Mars. :-)

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  2. brudbergSaturday, February 16, 2019 3:29:00 PM

    May there be a way to make a detour, or at least a swift return. Space is probably a very boring place

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  3. kaykualaSaturday, February 16, 2019 6:30:00 PM

    A lot of the normal niceties and joys will be missed. Appreciate your humor, Dr Jim!

    Hank

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  4. tonispencerSaturday, February 16, 2019 10:39:00 PM

    Shades of H G Wells and Edgar Rice Burroughs and their trips to the moon and Mars!

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  5. Kim M. RussellSunday, February 17, 2019 3:17:00 AM

    When I read your poem, Jim, the song ‘Fly me to the Moon’ popped into my head. Let me know what spring is like on Jupiter and Mars – and don’t forget to wave when you pass my house!

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  6. Old EggSunday, February 17, 2019 4:54:00 AM

    How I remember the thrill of walking or cycling by a cute girl's (from school) house hoping I could catch sight of her out of school hours. Mind you none of them ever lived in outer space!

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  7. Anmol (HA)Sunday, February 17, 2019 5:19:00 AM

    Ah, this is pretty cool, Jim! This bit made me feel all mushy and sweet: "How would I count the days/That/We'd be apart".

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  8. Debi SwimSunday, February 17, 2019 8:30:00 AM

    "Because there would be no night
    Nor bright sunrise
    How would I count the days
    That
    We'd be apart" …… How romantic

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  9. Susie ClevengerSunday, February 17, 2019 12:45:00 PM

    Oh, I'd hope they'd let you stop. Oh, yes, there needs to be light to count those missing days.

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  10. Sherry Blue SkySunday, February 17, 2019 12:47:00 PM

    You could tip the nose of the craft, in homage. Good one, Jim!

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  11. MarianMonday, February 18, 2019 5:23:00 AM

    How WOULD you count the days? That's a good question.

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  12. OutlawyerMonday, February 18, 2019 1:25:00 PM

    Ha. That is just lovely. I think that there would be sunsets on Mars and also stars at night, but not sure how they would look in a different atmosphere. But I loved the poignancy of the specifically missing the house of your friend--I'm guessing spouse--it's lovely. I am fine, Jim. Just working a lot at my job, and very tired. All best, k.

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  13. Vivian ZemsMonday, February 18, 2019 4:24:00 PM

    On this journey to Mars...anything's possible. Love the direction you took this in.

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  14. UnknownWednesday, February 20, 2019 3:27:00 PM

    I love this! Mixing a love poem with sci-fi -- can't get any better than that.
    Mary (Cactus Haiku)

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