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Sunday, May 17, 2009

One Single Impression: Tolerance II

Tolerance

ignorance is bliss
tolerance not much I have
straight to jail you go

foolishness is out
'cause tolerance none I have
don't be in my court

repentance if true
then tolerance some I have
charity abates


Copyright © 2009 Jimmiehov. All Rights Reserved



Find more poems at One Single Impression
"What's It Like" as prompt,
suggested by Regina of Kilauea Poetry

Painting is easy when you don’t know how, but very difficult when you do. Edgar Dégas
The same may go for poetry? (whatever, I enjoy painting with the words!)
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17 comments:

  1. gautami tripathySunday, May 17, 2009 12:19:00 AM

    I like the second stanza. The third one somewhat feels stilted..

    fingers dance merrily in air

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  2. JimSunday, May 17, 2009 12:49:00 AM

    Thank you, Gautami. I didn't like the third one either, I changed it quite a bit, now it is closer to telling my intended meaning.
    ..

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  3. Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)Sunday, May 17, 2009 1:34:00 AM

    I was reading this, looked away for a minute and I thought the third stanza changed.

    Jim, being old, I learned to have tolerance in just about everything except when someone physically attack me.

    Tell Mrs. Jim she is so right!

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  4. anthonynorthSunday, May 17, 2009 3:18:00 AM

    A great take on it. I particularly like the first stanza.

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  5. Edward S GaultSunday, May 17, 2009 4:18:00 AM

    An excellent piece, Jim.

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  6. SandyCarlsonSunday, May 17, 2009 6:33:00 AM

    Tolerance as grace has given way to tolerance as a blind eye, hasn't it? Who's entitled to umpteen chances to undermine the quality of others' lives?

    Well done. I like this piece very much.

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  7. Sherri B.Sunday, May 17, 2009 10:20:00 AM

    You make some very honest points! I enjoyed these.

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  8. spacedlawMonday, May 18, 2009 4:35:00 AM

    Difficult piece, one can really feel tension in it.

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  9. Quiet PathsMonday, May 18, 2009 9:16:00 AM

    Well around here if you do land in the Pen you've really had lots of chances to reform. I sure get where you are coming from.

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  10. AnonymousMonday, May 18, 2009 3:08:00 PM

    It is obvious that this is something you have thougt about a lot. I like the first best, too.

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  11. Tumblewords:Monday, May 18, 2009 4:04:00 PM

    Well said - the first one rings loud and true and the second spells the sentence. Nice work...

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  12. Tammy BrierlyMonday, May 18, 2009 8:02:00 PM

    I loved that last stanza Jim. Nice job on the prompt.

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  13. gautami tripathyTuesday, May 19, 2009 9:56:00 AM

    I like it much better!

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  14. Beth P.Tuesday, May 19, 2009 8:13:00 PM

    Jim--
    Is this some iambic pentameter?
    Interesting reading out loud!

    Thanks, Jim!

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  15. PattiWednesday, May 20, 2009 11:39:00 AM

    great interpretationof the prompt Jim...this was a hard one, I thought- as tolerance is a tricky one

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  16. Tammie LeeThursday, May 21, 2009 10:45:00 AM

    repentance if true

    Yes if true means a great deal.

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  17. MaggieFriday, May 22, 2009 5:28:00 PM

    Jim,
    I enjoyed this read.
    You said so much truth in these lines.

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