Our Guest
She spends her mornings in our front yard
That's where the shade is in the mornings
Where the shade is in the afternoons
In the afternoons this duck's across the street
She's across the street where the shade is then
She drinks sprinkler water from the street
I worry about the water in the street
Has washed fertilizer from the soil
Fertilizer from the soil tastes not good
She drinks it anyway that's all she's got
All she's got but needs it for her eggs
She'll hatch them in a shadow box nest
Her chicks after they're born will leave the nest
She'll spend her mornings in our front yard again
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- Photo and Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2023, All Rights Reserved
- I am linked with Merril D Smith who in dVerse MTB the Duplex has introduced to us a new form, "The Duplex". which I have copied its construction below. Read more also here, you may wish to try it. Fun, a little tricky to make it come out right, sort of.
- Click here to read the efforts of other writers, you will all like them.
- O yes, this starts out like a poem that I wrote on my other active blog. The duck really has adopted us, and spends its time in the three places.
- Here are the basic components of the form:
14 Lines, in couplets
9 to 11 syllables for each line (but the lines don’t have to have the same number of syllables)
The second line of each couplet is partially repeated or echoed by the first line of the following couplet.
The last line (line 14) echoes the first line.
The second line of each couplet should change the meaning of the first line in some unexpected way.
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Thank you for sharing the story of the duck in your front yard. They are fun to watch.
ReplyDeleteYou added 'again; in the last line to give it a beautiful cyclic feel.
ReplyDeleteA lovely visitor to start the morning, Jim! We haven’t had ducks visit for a long time – pheasants and magpies, but the ducks here tend to stay on the river. I like the way you follow the duck through the day.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting duplex Jim. Thanks for dropping by my blog.
ReplyDeleteMuch💜love
Her chicks after they're born will leave the nest
ReplyDeleteShe'll spend her mornings in our front yard again
Great close Dr Jim! Your poem provides a finality done very smoothly. Typically not easy to accomplish!
Hank
You nailed that form Jim...
ReplyDeleteYour duplex is simply ducky, Jim! I enjoyed it your guest as well :)
ReplyDeleteThere's a sense of vulnerability in this that speaks to me.
ReplyDeletePerhaps the duck is woundend and cannot fly. But you wrote a good poem and its also lovely story.
ReplyDeleteAnd yes i do still follow you.
Give this duck some good ducks food
and perhaps also water that is pure clean
if it comes again into your garden inbetween
Tine, thanks for nice comment. I hadn't realized you still read here. I'll peek your way again soon.
DeleteThe duck flies up to her nest every afternoon. She also flew to the mail box corner, I had chased her away from our yard. I had thought she had lost her way back to the flock. So I let her stay the from then the next day. She spent the nights on the nest until the babies came. They haven't returned.
Jim
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Tine, thanks for nice comment. I hadn't realized you still read here. I'll peek your way again soon.
DeleteThe duck flies up to her nest every afternoon. She also flew to the mail box corner, I had chased her away from our yard. I had thought she had lost her way back to the flock. So I let her stay the from then the next day. She spent the nights on the nest until the babies came. They haven't returned.
Jim
This is lovely, Jim!
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful. I love it.
ReplyDeleteJust lovely, from start to finish, Jim.
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David
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