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Saturday, August 28, 2021

Sunday Muse - Jack and Jill

THE HEAVY:

    The Deed 


What 

What have we done 

A moment, an hour 

A time we will always remember 

Tender memories not to be forgotten 

Even if the shame must remain 

All is stored in our hearts

Stored for savoring 


and 


 THE LIGHT:

    The Pills 


Jack and Jill sat on a wall 

Jill fell off and broke her toe 

Along came Mr. Devil 

Here to rescue, Doctor Doe 


Doctor doctor help me please 

Glued the toe gave her some pills 

Don't eat these, make you a tease 

She slipped Jack one, ease your ills 


Jack jumped down came on strong 

Jill tease to be was surprised 

Oh Jack I've waited so long 

Now I've found the best of guys 


Came Mr. Devil again 

Pay up, Doc Doe's pill bargain 

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 - Poem Copyright, Jimmiehov 2021, All Rights Reserved 

 - See Carrie's prompt photo for The Sunday Muse # 175,  at  http://thesundaymuse.blogspot.com/2021/08/the-sunday-muse-175.html?m=1 

 - stored also in The Writer's Pantry with Rosemary at https://poetsandstorytellersunited.blogspot.com/2021/08/writers-pantry-85-things-to-remember-if.html?m=1


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14 comments:

  1. Sumana RoySunday, August 29, 2021 3:46:00 AM

    A lovely read, Jim. The three characters are interesting.

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  2. C. SandlinSunday, August 29, 2021 8:22:00 AM

    Interesting play set-up.

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  3. indybevSunday, August 29, 2021 10:49:00 AM

    Methinks Jack and Jill need a de-pill-atory!

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  4. NalediSunday, August 29, 2021 11:25:00 AM

    I love the dark twist to a child-like tale!

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  5. TruedessaSunday, August 29, 2021 11:33:00 AM

    Now, I have this song lyric looping in my head. Interesting take on the prompt.

    "no pills gonna cure my ill"

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  6. HelenSunday, August 29, 2021 11:40:00 AM

    Tender memories + shame ... now that would be a shame. Cherish is a lovely word.

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  7. SunitaSunday, August 29, 2021 1:29:00 PM

    The first poem was sweet and the second one added a twist to the whole story :)

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  8. robkistnerSunday, August 29, 2021 2:06:00 PM

    Such lyrical darkness Jim — excellent take on the prompt.

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  9. phillip woodruff (jalopy dreams)Sunday, August 29, 2021 8:04:00 PM

    a twisted fairytale for sure jim. there is a pill for everything isn't there? a very interesting commentary, enjoyed this very much

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  10. Rosemary Nissen-WadeSunday, August 29, 2021 8:05:00 PM

    These contrasting yet complementary pieces made an interesting read. I particularly liked the twist-in-the-tail in each version.

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  11. qbitSunday, August 29, 2021 9:00:00 PM

    That last bit with the Doc and the pills and Jill and Jack out and the Devil's in. Do they all come tumbling down in the end?

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  12. Susie ClevengerMonday, August 30, 2021 3:59:00 PM

    Oh you took Jack and Jill down a dark spill. Love it!

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  13. purplepeninportland.comMonday, August 30, 2021 7:57:00 PM

    Love these characters, Jim!

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  14. Marion HortonWednesday, September 01, 2021 8:51:00 AM

    I wonder what Mother Goose would have to say about this version? 😄 Very entertaining.

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