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Sunday, February 01, 2015

Rewind -- a Flash 55 Poem


Rewind

Oh to feel young again, her sigh
Thoughts of birds in the trees
Flowers in the garden
Wearing sixteen bees
 
I'd like to run with the wind
Chase a butterfly, fall and get skinned
I'll beg your pardon
If I land on your toe
 
Please don't let me cry
Just wanna go. And go
 
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Poem Copyright,
© 2015 Jimmiehov,
All Rights Reserved
 
Rhyme scheme:
 . . a – b – c – b –
 . . d – d – c – e –
 . . a - e 
I'm linked with Kerry O'Connor at the Real Toads, FLASH 55 PLUS

Kerry's instructions:  " Write a piece of poetry or prose on a subject of your choice in precisely 55 WORDS ."  She suggested a line word count and a rhyme scheme for a form she has devised.  I used the rhyme scheme but not her word count.  I did end up with 55 words counting the title.

LOL (Little Old Lady) picture from a friend's Facebook

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12 comments:

  1. Kerry O'ConnorSunday, February 01, 2015 5:41:00 AM

    I read recently that adulthood is a myth - we remain children forever. The rhyme scheme worked really well in this poem, Jim.

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  2. brudbergSunday, February 01, 2015 7:00:00 AM

    I think we need to be children at all ages.. running with the sun and chasing butterflies sounds like a great way to spend a day. Much better than other grown-up toys that tend to burn fuel, and money.

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  3. GraceSunday, February 01, 2015 7:21:00 AM

    Sure, keep the child in you alive and just go...and go ~ I believe its a matter of attitude ~

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  4. Magaly GuerreroSunday, February 01, 2015 8:58:00 AM

    "Wearing sixteen bees..." such a sweet image.

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  5. Other MarySunday, February 01, 2015 3:56:00 PM

    Ah, youth is wasted on the young...as Shaw once said.

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  6. LydiaMonday, February 02, 2015 12:09:00 AM

    Must be this wistfulness in the air, because my poem also dealt with youth and aging. I will keep this verse close to my heart as spring comes. It is never too late to appreciate one's youth, even if it is passed!

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  7. MarianMonday, February 02, 2015 8:42:00 AM

    Nice, Jim. I like the end especially.

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  8. Susie ClevengerMonday, February 02, 2015 2:40:00 PM

    Me too! At least I want to make some sense in all my movement. My ADHD has me going, but nowhere mostly. lol

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  9. SusanMonday, February 02, 2015 5:12:00 PM

    Excellent.

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  10. OutlawyerWednesday, February 04, 2015 7:36:00 AM

    I wouldn't mind wearing sixteen bees! Only I'd like to wear them at a bit of a distance! Ha. Thanks, Jim. k. (http://manicddaily.wordpress.com)

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  11. UnknownWednesday, February 04, 2015 12:47:00 PM

    I like the subtle nature related words you use in this because it brought out the nature of a human being a bit more. We often stumble and fall at certain times, and I liked how you portrayed this.

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  12. audrey`Wednesday, February 04, 2015 3:28:00 PM

    Everyone is always young at heart, Dr & Mrs Jim :)

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