One Single Impression: Change
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Hey you
Change
There's time still, save your body and your soul
Body's rusting, the Devil has his hold
Time to change your way of living has come
Got to give up smoking and cussing now
Smoking will lead to cancer of the lung
Holes in your throat and wallet soon will come
Cussing's not the unforgivable sin
God hates it though, commandant number three
Yes, you
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The word, Change, is prompted at One Single Impression
Also shared and listed with Real Toads,Open Link Monday.
Labels: Humor(?), Loose Rhyme, One-Single-Impression, Open-Link-Mondays, Real Toads, Syllabic Form
posted by Jim @ 7/29/2013 12:41:00 AM
13 comments
13 Comments:
funny..humorous rather..although i just hope it is not interpreted in a moralistic manner..would rob the charm of the poem.
No where enough time for me to save my soul and the body is spiralling downhill depressingly fast.
Wow! This has energy, very much enjoyed!
Wow..a strong message weaved in such simple words!!
Change seem to get harder as we get older.. but it can make a big difference. Thanks for sharing, Jim.
I love this ... humor with a stern message.
hah. ain't that the truth.
Love the second line, Jim. And yes, I could hear something of a Hyde Park harangue in there! LOL
K
ugh cup of guilt with my mondy coffee - haha
There's a irony Mickey behind the plastic shell here. I love how you take humor and irony, mix and pour. Jim, one note: The Third Commandment varies according to one's faith path.
Jewish, Orthodox, Anglican, general Protestant, and others say #3 is "Do not take the name of God in vain"; however, Lutherans and Catholics say it's "Remember the Sabbath and keep it holy." Ironically (!), this little Christian Left girl thinks the second translation fits this picture, in all, more fully, since Sundays are now shopping days, days for Disney, etc.
I'm not a Biblical literalist, nor do I want to return to "Blue Laws" that kept everything closed on Sundays, just thought I'd point that out and let you know how I felt! Great job, and I loved the M&Ms on the xylophone, like the People Mover... Amy
Yes! You'll have holes in your lungs before your wallet....
Change is the only constant, Dr Jim :)
well put ...and direct Jim...:)
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