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Thursday, June 22, 2017

A poem, trial metafiction

Dr. Who? 

 Dear reader, my wish for you is 
try to remember who I am 
I'm who you think I am. Only  
I won't say who on these pages 

 You see the day I met Louise 
We had this thing, love at first sight 
Very short, courtship made in Hell 
Married Jackson style.  Fever still 

 She too had her thing, other men 
Caught them one night in swank hotel 
Dead, I shot him dead, Texas style 
You may remember reading this 

 Who I was, lawyer sprang me loose 
Can't mess with Texas boys they knew 
Gave me alias sent me back 
Married again Belle didn't know 

 She'll tow the line no second chance 
Louise?  I shot her too, in a way 
Hit man clean shot in her head 
Sent him back to Columbia 

 It wasn't me who did them in 
Or is it?  I'm just "Belle's old man" 
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 - Photo and Poem Copyright © 2017 Jimmiehov, All Rights Reserved

 - I'm linked with, at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, Literary Excursions with Kerry,   http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2017/06/literary-excursions-with-kerry.html

 - Kerry wants us to try something somewhat new in poetry, metafiction.  You can read an introduction and get ideas about writing metafiction style at the link above. 
 - Playing a little bit here too, I'm using one syllable words, maximum one word or none with more per line.  A few times I broke my self inflicted rule. 
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10 comments:

  1. Rosemary Nissen-WadeFriday, June 23, 2017 2:02:00 AM

    No, you broke it 5 times (in various ways). Fun poem anyway.

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  2. Gillena CoxFriday, June 23, 2017 6:21:00 AM

    He was just too lucky, I'd say

    Could see you having fun writing this one

    Much love...

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  3. Debi SwimFriday, June 23, 2017 10:14:00 AM

    Poor Belle.

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  4. Kerry O'ConnorFriday, June 23, 2017 10:19:00 AM

    The single syllables create a very interesting clipped style, Jim. It definitely adds to the story-telling.

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  5. Magaly GuerreroFriday, June 23, 2017 11:13:00 AM

    This reads like a film, Jim, and I really like it. The speaker sounds like he just stepped out of the screen.

    And the title made me think of the Doctor Who TV show, of course. :-)

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  6. brudbergFriday, June 23, 2017 11:14:00 AM

    This story fits very well to be told in single syllables...

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  7. Sanaa RizviFriday, June 23, 2017 1:01:00 PM

    Such an evocative write, Jim!

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  8. Samyuktha Semi JayaprakashSaturday, June 24, 2017 5:20:00 AM

    A nice literary excursion!

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  9. AnonymousSaturday, June 24, 2017 7:52:00 AM

    This makes me think of Johnny Cash ... because of the "Jackson" reference and the way it's sort of written in the storytelling style of his Folsom Prison song.

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  10. JulianMonday, July 03, 2017 2:28:00 PM

    Loved this and the fast paced rythm

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