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Sunday, July 12, 2009

One Single Impression: Thinking


Thinking, one

thinking all the time
I've been thinking to myself
'bout something special
[cat is being awfully smug
since he ate the canary]

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Auguste Rodin's, The Thinker
from Wikimedia Commons,
"A database of 4,738,144 freely usable
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Thinking, two

I've been thinking of times we had;
places we went, nice life we lived,
and joys we shared. Thinking about you.

Been thinking of the home we made;
the house we found, children we have,
and the love we had. Thinking about us.

I've been thinking now that you've gone;
what did I do, where have you been?
I'm alone. Thinking about you and me.

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Thinking, three

I've been thinking a lot of thoughts;
stay here alone, eat by myself;
could you come back? Been thinking about it?

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Thinking, four

I've been thinking a lot of thoughts.
So dearly we loved each other.
Oh would that you had not died.


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27 comments:

  1. Geraldine Saturday, July 11, 2009 11:42:00 PM

    I'm wondering who you are writing about Jim. I've scrolled down the first page of your blog, not clear who this is written about. So sad to read...hope it's just thoughts you had, not something that actually happened.

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  2. JimSaturday, July 11, 2009 11:49:00 PM

    Geraldine, Heavens no, especially the last is not a part of my life story (except for my Mom, MIL, and a few more than casual, i.e. good, some very good, friends).

    Guys, please do remember that I am always experimenting with my 'poems.' Remember when I put my disclaimer at the bottom? My removing those lines didn't mean that I had graduated.
    ..

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  3. The Dark LordSaturday, July 11, 2009 11:52:00 PM

    The poem touches one in profound ways.. Heartfelt and tragic, it laments on the times that were.. Death is irrevocable.. It always leaves us woefully underprepared to face it.. be it of our own or of somebody we love.. We can merely sit back to reflect upon the loss.. and take comfort from the good times that had been...

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  4. The Dark LordSaturday, July 11, 2009 11:54:00 PM

    Ah.. reassuring to see it doesnt concern you..
    Oh, I almost forgot to thank you for this wonderful prompt!! Quite a challenge to the OSI poets, I daresay.. will be interesting to see what people come up with this one!

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  5. MojoSunday, July 12, 2009 12:27:00 AM

    Hey Jim, thanks for stopping by. I didn't get "death" but "separation" from this. Granted one can feel an awful lot like the other to those left behind, but when the speaker is asking questions like "what did I do" I get that (one single) impression.

    To respond to your comment, mine could actually be about any of several people and I really hope you're (and by extension, I'm) right. But that's where the "Thinking" (or perhaps "over-thinking") comes in.

    Couldn't pass up a prompt like this one. Not with the number of times I've gotten myself in trouble for "thinking too much". It was a natural.

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  6. Gemma WisemanSunday, July 12, 2009 1:03:00 AM

    Layers of sensitive sadnesses here being peeled away and open to the glare of light! Beautiful!

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  7. Edward S GaultSunday, July 12, 2009 2:04:00 AM

    Thank you for the prompt this week!
    I also dealt withb the Great Thinker( Great minds think alike).
    I enjoyed all your poems.

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  8. anthonynorthSunday, July 12, 2009 2:32:00 AM

    Deep thoughts in these, ending with a beautifully poignant touch.

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  9. SandyCarlsonSunday, July 12, 2009 5:26:00 AM

    An incredible sequence. You created loneliness through words and made it palpable. These poems make me realize being alone is not my thing.

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  10. spacedlawSunday, July 12, 2009 5:39:00 AM

    So sad (except the first one, ifone is not a canary).

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  11. Sherri B.Sunday, July 12, 2009 7:21:00 AM

    This is so heartfelt, and has such a yearning to it...I could feel the loneliness of this person as they lived on without their loved one. Beautifully done!

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  12. indicaspeciesSunday, July 12, 2009 8:08:00 AM

    I'm touched by this poignant poetry. Wonderfully expressed!

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  13. lissaSunday, July 12, 2009 9:20:00 AM

    they'll very provoking, I found myself feeling a bit down after reading the last one

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  14. MaggieSunday, July 12, 2009 10:06:00 AM

    Jim,
    I enjoyed reading about all your thinking and I sure hope the cat doen not get indigestion from eating the canary...

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  15. sgreerpittSunday, July 12, 2009 10:51:00 AM

    I love the way you are able to put yourself into the mind of another, you are a great writer of fiction, even if it is in the form of poetry!

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  16. Naraa MaloneSunday, July 12, 2009 4:17:00 PM

    I know a loss of someone special gets my brain turning in so many circles that I long for it to just shut up. thank you for the great prompt. I had fun with it.

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  17. ifSunday, July 12, 2009 7:02:00 PM

    very nice to read that...!

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  18. Tumblewords:Sunday, July 12, 2009 8:15:00 PM

    Nice work - loved the prompt... your words are always a joy to read...

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  19. Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)Monday, July 13, 2009 2:31:00 AM

    How utterly beautiful, these train of thoughts --- wraps one whole life into a wonderful web of what was verses what is verses what could have been, and the thoughts that bridge them are amazing Jim! This is indeed a profound and thought provoking web of communication you have created here!

    No way I would have missed this prompt --- even if my hand had frozen in place, I would have found a way to post something on a prompt that governs my entire life "thinking" -- I believe without thought nothing was or could be created, as has been proven by everything I know as life, ... "in the beginning was the word ..."

    You did yourself proud, Jim. Thank you for such a wonderful inspiring prompt that made me feel good, not just sharing it, but first experiencing it so that I may share it.

    Yes, I am feeling so much better these days, thank goodness!

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  20. DeLiMonday, July 13, 2009 5:20:00 AM

    i find 'em all sweet and softlike

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  21. gautami tripathyMonday, July 13, 2009 8:09:00 AM

    I liked all. Those convey different thoughts to me.

    that thin line

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  22. Patois42Tuesday, July 14, 2009 9:52:00 AM

    Thank you for the prompt and thank you for such fine offerings. Definitely glad it is not you experiencing this despair.

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  23. AnonymousTuesday, July 14, 2009 11:22:00 AM

    wow Jim...
    u r thinking a lot! :)

    thanks for the prompt!
    and the "thinking, two" was my favorite! it was beautiful!

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  24. gabrielleTuesday, July 14, 2009 5:35:00 PM

    Wonderful contemplation of the intricate layers of lives joined and separated. I’m glad to hear you haven’t personally experienced a tragic loss such as this and am impressed by your empathic abilities. The sense of loneliness is palpable.

    Thanks for the prompt. It has inspired some beautiful work.

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  25. PattiTuesday, July 14, 2009 7:15:00 PM

    Jim~ those are sad!!! But they are GOOD!!- You especially captured such poignant feelings in the second one. Thanks for inspiring with this prompt! Also thank you for the kind words on my post- I really appreciate it. It is a family issue so it is bound to not be pretty~

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  26. SandyCarlsonWednesday, July 15, 2009 10:18:00 AM

    Sorry Mr. Linky bailed. I will ask Andree, who is the techie at OSI.

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  27. gabrielleWednesday, July 15, 2009 9:22:00 PM

    Thoughts are the parents of feelings. I can see the edges softening.

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