One Single Impression: Intersections
Intersections (a ditty)
roads must cross
and roads must meet
he'll meet you at the corner
please don't be so very cross
but the corner doesn't
count
for some--
not past two or ten
no intersection found
then
souls must cross
and they will meet
his vocabulary's small
why he says crossroads to all
words can cross
and they will meet
three or four or five or six
crossword letters intersect
- - - - - - - - - - -
intersection's here
now you look to left and right
oops missed the red light
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"Intersections" as prompt,
suggested by H.T. of Haiku Tuna
Painting is easy when you don’t know how, but very difficult when you do. Edgar Dégas
The same may go for poetry? (whatever, I enjoy painting with the words!)
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Labels: Ditty Poem, Humor, One Single Impression, Senryū, Syllabic Form
posted by Jim @ 6/07/2009 12:03:00 AM
19 comments
19 Comments:
corner doesn't count for some..
Wonderful.
In the third stanza
if you put "his vocabulary is small",
it would read better.
But it is your call...
strings cross with wires
Fun poem! A great find to read early morning. Thanks.
That was fun, rounded off with a great line.
This was fun, Jim! Except why is it that I always seem to miss the light? hahaha!
This was fun, Jim. I like the puzzle image.
'oops' indeed!
Clever li'l piece here, Jim.
Thanks for your 'Hotel California' comment. I hope that my friend 'A' doesn't feel as much a hostage as I've always felt in that song!
Have a great week--
Thank you for my morning chuckle, oops indeed.
I enjoy this line: souls must cross and they will meet
nice thing to count on~
One can truely have problems when they do not see the red light at the cross roads.
Thankfully it does not always result in death.
i remember this photo and i still love it! i like how you depict crossroads and crossing souls!
Fun poem..
the pictures lead me to some flashbacks...good, old, happy days
and the words, as always are witty
I like your poem...!
Love these intersections!
and a clever little ditty it is too! I like the repetition and the rhythm of this.
Hi Jim,
Enjoyed this poem and was surprised and like the end! I like the play on words especially the different meanings and permutations of "cross." (I enjoy crossword puzzles and often hit a "red light" trying to figure out an answer.)
Oh, I"ve been out of blogland,for the past few months, for the most part, and have returned with a new blog and new name. I used to be "Gel." I have commented on some common blogs once in a while and seen your comments like on "Beloved Dreamer"'s exquisite poetry blog, but my computer exploded and I've not had internet. Hope all is well with you, Mrs. Jim and yours!
Jim, this is great. How very clever you are. I love it.
As you may have noticed my BD web blog is gone. While I was in hospital it came under attack and was removed. I lost all of my work.
My new site is :
http://belovedhaikudreams.blogspot.com
My email is the same.
Glad to be back among the living
love, Melanie-bd
Well done Jim! Thanks for this inspiring and uplifting take on this great prompt.
Yup- I enjoyed it! Always clever with words and great picture!
ah very clever jim... and excellent ditty!!! ..oh, blue monday is fab... love the color blue...
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